School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to make your sentences more natural and concise. For example, say "My school, Grace Academy, is located in the northeastern state of India, just a five-minute walk from my house. It was the only school I attended throughout my high school years." This improves clarity and fluency.

例: My school, Grace Academy, is located in the northeastern state of India, just a five-minute walk from my house. It was the only school I attended throughout my high school years.

提案: Your answer is too long and repetitive. Try to be more concise and use linking words to connect ideas. For example, "Yes, I like my school because it is where I studied and made many childhood memories, including meeting my first best friend. Moreover, it provided me with the education I needed to succeed."

例: Yes, I like my school because it is where I studied and made many childhood memories, including meeting my first best friend. Moreover, it provided me with the education I needed to succeed.

提案: Your answer is clear but can be improved by avoiding repetition and using linking words. For example, "Yes, my school is a good place to study because it follows the curriculum set by the Council of the States. Additionally, we have excellent teachers and many hardworking students."

例: Yes, my school is a good place to study because it follows the curriculum set by the Council of the States. Additionally, we have excellent teachers and many hardworking students.

提案: Your answer is a bit confusing and grammatically incorrect. Try to structure your answer clearly and use linking words. For example, "The environment at my school is versatile and dynamic because it includes students of all ages, from kindergarten to 10th grade. Therefore, the school is always full of energy."

例: The environment at my school is versatile and dynamic because it includes students of all ages, from kindergarten to 10th grade. Therefore, the school is always full of energy.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas more clearly and concisely. For example, "Interest in study is very important. Our teachers always explain how studying prepares us for future challenges, which motivates us to learn."

例: Interest in study is very important. Our teachers always explain how studying prepares us for future challenges, which motivates us to learn.

× It was located near my house, walkable distance of about 5 minutes.

✓ It was located near my house, at a walkable distance of about 5 minutes.

The original sentence is missing the preposition 'at' before 'walkable distance', which is necessary to indicate the location or extent of distance. Adding 'at' corrects the sentence structure and makes it grammatically correct.

× I was the only school I started my whole high school.

✓ It was the only school where I completed my entire high school.

The original sentence is unclear and structurally incorrect. 'I was the only school' is incorrect because a person cannot be a school. The correction clarifies that the school was the only one attended for the entire high school period, improving clarity and grammar.

× Yes, I like my school because that is the only place I have studied and also that is also where I have made most of my childhood memories where I have had my first best friend and also it was a school that has given me the education that I needed to be where I am today.

✓ Yes, I like my school because it is the only place where I have studied, and it is also where I made most of my childhood memories, where I had my first best friend. It was a school that gave me the education I needed to be where I am today.

The original sentence is too long and uses 'and also' repeatedly, which is redundant and affects clarity. Breaking it into shorter sentences and removing redundant conjunctions improves readability and grammatical correctness.

× It follows the curriculum that is provided by the Council of the States.

✓ It follows the curriculum provided by the Council of States.

The phrase 'provided by the Council of the States' is correct, but 'the Council of the States' is more natural without 'the' before 'States' if it is a proper noun. Also, 'that is' can be omitted for conciseness.

× You can see a versatile and dynamic environment in this school because it has all the students of all age starting from the kindergarten which are in the different sections or area and also it is still the 10th standards so it is always full of energy.

✓ You can see a versatile and dynamic environment in this school because it has students of all ages, starting from kindergarten, who are in different sections or areas. Also, it includes up to the 10th standard, so it is always full of energy.

The original sentence has issues with singular/plural forms: 'students of all age' should be 'students of all ages'; 'kindergarten which are' should be 'kindergarten, who are'; 'sections or area' should be 'sections or areas'; '10th standards' should be '10th standard'. Correcting these improves grammatical accuracy.

× The teachers gave to us a good insight on the importance of studying.

✓ The teachers gave us a good insight into the importance of studying.

The verb 'gave' does not require the preposition 'to' when followed by an indirect object; 'gave us' is correct. Also, the correct preposition with 'insight' is 'into', not 'on'.

× They always give us ready for whatever it does in the future and the challenges that we would probably be facing.

✓ They always prepare us for whatever happens in the future and the challenges that we will probably face.

The original sentence is ungrammatical and unclear. 'Give us ready' is incorrect; 'prepare us' is appropriate. 'Whatever it does' is unclear; 'whatever happens' is better. 'Would probably be facing' is changed to 'will probably face' for clarity and correct tense.

× So it faces lots of faces are given on the importance of studies.

✓ So, a lot of emphasis is given on the importance of studies.

The original sentence is confusing and grammatically incorrect. 'Faces are given' is nonsensical. The correction uses 'a lot of emphasis is given' to convey the intended meaning clearly and correctly.