School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi lặp từ và cấu trúc câu chưa tự nhiên. Bạn nên trả lời trực tiếp, tránh lặp từ và sử dụng cấu trúc câu đơn giản, rõ ràng hơn.

例: I am studying at the Academic Policy and Development, which is located in the western part of Hanoi. My school is very beautiful.

提案: Bạn nên tránh lặp từ và câu chưa hoàn chỉnh. Hãy sử dụng câu đầy đủ và liên kết các ý bằng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Yes, I really like my school because it has a variety of facilities, such as a library and community labs, which make studying very convenient.

提案: Bạn nên chú ý phát âm và ngữ pháp, tránh lỗi sai về số nhiều và dùng từ phù hợp. Ngoài ra, hãy dùng từ nối để câu trả lời mạch lạc hơn.

例: Absolutely, my school is a good place to study because it has various facilities, such as modern classrooms and a beautiful library. Moreover, the teachers are supportive and knowledgeable.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn có nhiều lỗi phát âm và ngữ pháp, khiến ý không rõ ràng. Bạn nên sử dụng câu đơn giản, tránh lặp từ và diễn đạt rõ ràng hơn.

例: My school is surrounded by many trees, which creates a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere. This helps students feel comfortable and relaxed while studying.

提案: Câu trả lời của bạn thiếu sự liên kết và có lỗi ngữ pháp. Bạn nên trả lời đầy đủ ý, dùng từ nối và cấu trúc câu đúng để ý tưởng rõ ràng hơn.

例: I think having interest in studying plays an important role because it helps students understand topics more easily and stay motivated.

× I'm I'm studying at the Academic Policy and Development which is located in the western of Hanoi.

✓ I'm studying at the Academic Policy and Development which is located in the west of Hanoi.

The phrase 'in the western of Hanoi' is incorrect. The correct prepositional phrase is 'in the west of Hanoi' because 'west' is a noun indicating direction, while 'western' is an adjective and should not be used with 'of' in this context.

× And as the my my school are very beautiful.

✓ And my school is very beautiful.

The subject 'school' is singular, so the verb should be 'is' instead of 'are'. Also, the phrase 'as the my my' is incorrect and redundant; it should be simplified to 'my'.

× Yes, of course. I really like my school, my academic, my Academy. Has a variety of facilities such as library and community labs, so it's convenient.

✓ Yes, of course. I really like my school, my academy. It has a variety of facilities such as a library and community labs, so it's convenient.

The sentence 'Has a variety of facilities...' lacks a subject and is a sentence fragment. Adding 'It' as the subject corrects the sentence structure. Also, 'academic' is incorrectly used; 'academy' is appropriate here. Articles are needed before 'library'.

× Absolutely, my screen is a good place to study because my school has a variety of facility such as modern classroom and library, a beautiful library and the teacher are supportive and knowledgeable.

✓ Absolutely, my school is a good place to study because my school has a variety of facilities such as modern classrooms and a beautiful library, and the teachers are supportive and knowledgeable.

'Screen' is likely a mishearing or typo for 'school'. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match 'a variety of'. 'Classroom' should be plural 'classrooms' to match the context. 'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to agree with 'are'.

× My screen is surrounded by many trees which which creates a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere.

✓ My school is surrounded by many trees which create a peaceful and beautiful atmosphere.

'Screen' should be 'school'. The relative pronoun 'which' refers to 'many trees' (plural), so the verb should be 'create' (plural) instead of 'creates' (singular).

× This this thing as how screwed Feel a health student feel comfortable and relaxed during studying.

✓ This makes students feel healthy, comfortable, and relaxed during studying.

The original sentence is unclear and ungrammatical. It lacks proper structure and contains nonsensical phrases. The correction provides a clear and grammatically correct sentence conveying the intended meaning.

× I think inserted interest in study. Plays an important role because it helps students. It helps students can understand the topic and easily.

✓ I think interest in study plays an important role because it helps students understand the topic easily.

'Inserted interest' is incorrect; it should be 'interest'. The sentence fragments 'Plays an important role' and 'It helps students' should be combined properly. 'Helps students can understand' is incorrect; it should be 'helps students understand'. The adverb 'easily' should be placed after the verb phrase.