School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Старайтесь избегать слов-паразитов, таких как "umm" и "uh", чтобы сделать речь более естественной и уверенной. Также постарайтесь сделать ответ более кратким и структурированным, например, начните с прямого ответа, а затем добавьте детали, используя связующие слова.

例: I attend a university located in the city center of beautiful Moscow, near the busy Kuznetsky Most street. It is truly in the heart of the city, which makes it very convenient.

提案: Ответ можно сделать более естественным и конкретным, избегая двойных отрицаний и нечетких выражений. Используйте связующие слова для плавности и добавьте конкретные причины вашего мнения.

例: Yes, I like my school because it offers great resources and supportive staff. However, I believe there is room for improvement, especially in updating the library facilities.

提案: Ответ хороший, но можно улучшить связность, используя больше связующих слов и конкретизировать преимущества школы. Также избегайте повторения слов, например, "offers" и "open up".

例: Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study, particularly for architecture enthusiasts. It provides specialized courses and experienced teachers, which together create many opportunities for success in this field.

提案: Избегайте слов-паразитов и старайтесь выражать мысли более ясно и связно. Используйте связующие слова для логичности и конкретизируйте, почему среда расслабляющая и безопасная.

例: I believe my school offers a relaxing and safe environment for studying architecture, which is important because this field can be very stressful. Therefore, having a calm atmosphere helps students focus better.

提案: Сократите количество слов-паразитов и сделайте ответ более плавным и структурированным. Добавьте связующие слова и конкретные причины важности интереса к учебе.

例: I believe having an interest in your field of study is very important because it helps you work effectively, stay focused, and remain motivated throughout your studies.

× It offers specialized courses and the experienced teachers which open up many opportunities for success in this field.

✓ It offers specialized courses and experienced teachers who open up many opportunities for success in this field.

The definite article 'the' before 'experienced teachers' is unnecessary because it refers to teachers in general, not specific ones. Also, 'which' is used for things, while 'who' is appropriate for people, so 'who' should be used here.

× I believe my school provides a relaxing and umm uh, safe environment for studying architecture because, uh, this field puts you through a lot of stress and umm, it has to be gone somewhere.

✓ I believe my school provides a relaxing and safe environment for studying architecture because this field puts you through a lot of stress and you need to go somewhere to relax.

The original sentence is unclear and contains awkward phrasing ('it has to be gone somewhere'). The correction clarifies the meaning by restructuring the sentence to express that one needs a place to relax due to the stress of the field.

× I don't think I have anything negative to say about my school, so therefore I'm pretty satisfied with it, but there's room for improvements definitely.

✓ I don't think I have anything negative to say about my school, so therefore I'm pretty satisfied with it, but there's definitely room for improvement.

The phrase 'room for improvements' is incorrect because 'improvement' is an uncountable noun here. The correct phrase is 'room for improvement.' Also, 'definitely' should be placed before 'room' for natural word order.