School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides good details but is a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to keep your response concise and avoid redundancy by combining related ideas and using linking words for coherence.

例: My school is located in the heart of my hometown, surrounded by parks and local shops. It has a long history and is well known in the community. Since it is next to my house, I can easily walk there.

提案: Your answer is somewhat disorganized and contains some grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence followed by supporting details, and avoid run-on sentences. Also, be careful with word choice and grammar.

例: Yes, I really liked my school because it was beautiful and well maintained. It offered interesting extracurricular activities, and I made many good friends there. The facilities, such as the library and sports center, were excellent, and the teachers were very supportive.

提案: Your answer covers relevant points but includes filler words and minor errors. Try to avoid fillers like 'uh' and use precise vocabulary (e.g., 'conducive' instead of 'conductive'). Also, organize your ideas clearly with linking words.

例: Yes, I believe my school is a good place to study because it has supportive and knowledgeable teachers. Additionally, the excellent facilities, such as libraries and computer labs, and the quiet environment make it conducive to learning. The school also has a strong reputation and high academic standards.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but could be improved by correcting minor errors and using linking words to enhance coherence. Also, avoid filler sounds like 'UH'.

例: I believe the environment at my school is positive and supportive. The teachers are encouraging and always willing to help. Moreover, there are many extracurricular activities that promote a sense of community, and the school has a strong anti-bullying policy, making it a safe place for everyone.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but contains some grammatical errors and could be more concise. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and check subject-verb agreement.

例: Interest is very important in study because it keeps students motivated and engaged. When students are interested, they are more likely to understand and retain information. Furthermore, interest encourages deeper exploration and can drive students to pursue further education.

× My school is in my hometown. It was located in the heart of my hometown and it was well known in the community and has a long history.

✓ My school is in my hometown. It is located in the heart of my hometown and it is well known in the community and has a long history.

The sentence mixes past tense 'was located' and 'was well known' with present tense 'has a long history'. Since the school still exists, present tense should be used consistently to describe its location and reputation.

× Our school was surrounded by parks and local shops and it was next to my house and I could go there by walking.

✓ Our school is surrounded by parks and local shops and it is next to my house and I can go there by walking.

The description refers to the current state of the school and its surroundings, so present tense should be used instead of past tense to maintain consistency and accuracy.

× Yes, absolutely our school was beautiful and well maintained and also organizes interest, interesting extracurricular activities and also I made many good friends there and our school facilities like the library and the Sports Center were excellent and teachers were very supportive and.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Our school was beautiful and well maintained. It also organized interesting extracurricular activities. I made many good friends there. Our school facilities, like the library and the Sports Center, were excellent, and the teachers were very supportive.

The original sentence is a run-on with multiple ideas joined improperly. Breaking it into separate sentences improves clarity and corrects sentence structure errors.

× Yes, absolutely our school was beautiful and well maintained and also organizes interest, interesting extracurricular activities and also I made many good friends there and our school facilities like the library and the Sports Center were excellent and teachers were very supportive and.

✓ Yes, absolutely. Our school was beautiful and well maintained. It also organized interesting extracurricular activities. I made many good friends there. Our school facilities, like the library and the Sports Center, were excellent, and the teachers were very supportive.

The verb 'organizes' is in present tense while the rest of the sentence is in past tense. Changing 'organizes' to 'organized' maintains tense consistency.

× As I mentioned before, our school has teachers that are, uh, very supportive and knowledgeable and also our school had excellent facilities like libraries and computer labs and the environment was quiet and conductive to studying and also it had a good reputation and high academic standards.

✓ As I mentioned before, our school has teachers that are very supportive and knowledgeable. Also, our school has excellent facilities like libraries and computer labs, and the environment is quiet and conducive to studying. It also has a good reputation and high academic standards.

The sentence inconsistently switches between present and past tense. Since the school still exists, present tense should be used throughout. Also, 'conductive' is incorrect; the correct word is 'conducive'.

× the environment was quiet and conductive to studying

✓ the environment was quiet and conducive to studying

The word 'conductive' means capable of conducting electricity or heat, which is incorrect here. The correct adjective is 'conducive', meaning making a certain situation or outcome likely or possible.

× I believe that our UH environment is positive and supportive.

✓ I believe that our school environment is positive and supportive.

The phrase 'our UH environment' is unclear and likely a typo. Replacing 'UH' with 'school' clarifies the meaning and fits the context.

× The teachers were very encouraging and always willing to help.

✓ The teachers are very encouraging and always willing to help.

Since the student is describing the current environment of the school, present tense 'are' should be used instead of past tense 'were'.

× Also there were many extracurricular activities that promote a sense of community and also the school had a strong anti bullying policy making it a safe place for everyone.

✓ Also, there are many extracurricular activities that promote a sense of community, and the school has a strong anti-bullying policy, making it a safe place for everyone.

The sentence mixes past tense 'were' and 'had' with present tense 'promote'. Since the school still exists, present tense should be used consistently. Also, 'anti bullying' should be hyphenated as 'anti-bullying'.

× Interest keeps students is motivated and engaged in their studies.

✓ Interest keeps students motivated and engaged in their studies.

The phrase 'keeps students is motivated' is incorrect. The verb 'keep' should be followed by an object and a past participle without 'is'. Removing 'is' corrects the sentence.

× Interest can lead to deeper exploration and a better grasp of the subject and also it can drives students to pursue further education.

✓ Interest can lead to deeper exploration and a better grasp of the subject, and it can drive students to pursue further education.

The modal verb 'can' should be followed by the base form of the verb. 'Drives' is incorrect; it should be 'drive'.