School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and accurate location without mixing unrelated places. Also, use correct prepositions and sentence structure to make your answer more natural and understandable.

例: My school is located in the eastern part of South China, in Hangzhou city, quite far from the city centre.

提案: Avoid redundancy and improve sentence clarity. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and correct some grammar mistakes for a more natural response.

例: At first, I didn't like my school because it felt slow and the surroundings weren't very attractive. However, I have gotten used to it and now I appreciate the friendly teachers, students, and colleagues.

提案: Use correct grammar and vocabulary, and clarify your points. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'anymore areas' and use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because the library has plenty of seats and a quiet atmosphere. However, I believe the library could benefit from having more areas for reciting or group study.

提案: Be careful with word choice and clarity. 'Angels' seems incorrect here. Use precise vocabulary and link your ideas clearly.

例: Overall, the environment at my school is very pleasant, with lots of trees and even some friendly dogs around. Additionally, the library provides a very quiet place to study.

提案: Improve sentence structure and word choice for clarity and naturalness. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I think interest is very important in studying because it motivates you and gives you more energy to work hard. When you are interested, it's easier to focus, and studying feels like an exciting adventure to explore new knowledge.

× My school is in the east South of China, located in the Hangzhou and far away from the city center in universities Hong Kong.

✓ My school is in the southeast of China, located in Hangzhou and far away from the city center and universities in Hong Kong.

The phrase 'east South' is incorrect; the correct order is 'southeast'. Also, 'the Hangzhou' should be 'Hangzhou' without 'the'. The sentence structure is confusing; 'universities Hong Kong' is unclear and should be rephrased to 'universities in Hong Kong' if that is the intended meaning.

× Maybe yes, the library have plenty of seats and have quite atmosphere to study, but I think library needs anymore areas to recite.

✓ Maybe yes, the library has plenty of seats and a quiet atmosphere to study, but I think the library needs more areas to recite.

The subject 'library' is singular, so the verb should be 'has' not 'have'. Also, 'quite atmosphere' is incorrect; it should be 'quiet atmosphere'. 'Anymore areas' is incorrect; 'more areas' is appropriate here.

× My school is in the east South of China, located in the Hangzhou and far away from the city center in universities Hong Kong.

✓ My school is in the southeast of China, located in Hangzhou and far away from the city center and universities in Hong Kong.

The preposition 'in' before 'universities Hong Kong' is misplaced and confusing. It should be 'and universities in Hong Kong' to clarify the meaning.

× It's hard to say at first, I felt it's so slow and the surroundings not really attractive, but I have used it to it and I appreciate my friendly teacher and students and colleagues.

✓ It's hard to say at first; I felt it was so slow and the surroundings were not really attractive, but I have gotten used to it and I appreciate my friendly teachers, students, and colleagues.

The pronoun 'it's' is incorrectly used instead of 'it was' to describe past feelings. 'I have used it to it' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'I have gotten used to it'. Also, plural forms 'teachers' and 'students' are appropriate here.

× Overall the environment is very good, there are lots of trees and even have dogs or angels, and the library is very quiet to study.

✓ Overall, the environment is very good; there are lots of trees and even dogs or angels, and the library is very quiet for studying.

The phrase 'and even have dogs or angels' lacks a subject; it should be 'and even dogs or angels'. Also, 'quiet to study' is incorrect; the correct phrase is 'quiet for studying'.

× I think it's very important because the interests make the study be more motivated and have much more energy to work.

✓ I think it's very important because interest makes studying more motivating and gives you much more energy to work.

'The interests' should be 'interest' as an uncountable noun here. 'Make the study be more motivated' is awkward; 'makes studying more motivating' is better. 'Have much more energy' should be 'gives you much more energy' for clarity.