School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is informative but a bit long and slightly repetitive. Try to make your response more concise and natural by avoiding redundancy and breaking it into shorter sentences. Also, use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: My school is in my hometown and is a government institution mainly for children of transferable government employees. It follows a uniform curriculum to ensure consistent education standards. I like it because the environment is disciplined, and the teachers are very supportive.

提案: Your answer contains many fillers such as 'uh' and 'umm' which affect fluency. Try to reduce these fillers and organise your answer with clear linking words to make it more coherent and natural.

例: Yes, I like my school very much because it offers many facilities and diverse courses. For example, it has a well-equipped library, an excellent sports center, and a music room with various instruments. Moreover, the teachers are knowledgeable and supportive.

提案: Your answer is relevant and well-structured but contains a minor hesitation ('my ex my school'). Try to speak more confidently and use linking words like 'besides' or 'furthermore' to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study because it offers a wide range of courses catering to diverse students. Furthermore, it focuses on holistic development by organising various cultural and extracurricular activities.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and hesitations. Avoid starting with a question form when answering. Also, try to use linking words and correct grammar to make your answer clearer and more natural.

例: The environment at my school is both competitive and supportive. There are many extracurricular activities that give students a chance to showcase their talents and pursue their interests.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant but contains a small grammatical error ('when a student in genuinely interested'). Try to avoid such mistakes and use linking words like 'because' and 'therefore' to enhance coherence.

例: In my opinion, interest is crucial in studies because when a student is genuinely interested in a subject, they tend to understand and retain information more easily. Therefore, interest motivates students to pay more attention and engage actively with the material.

× My school is located in my hometown and it is in government institution that primarily admits children of government employees who are in transferable job and it follows uniform curriculum to maintain consistency in education standards.

✓ My school is located in my hometown and it is a government institution that primarily admits children of government employees who are in transferable jobs and it follows a uniform curriculum to maintain consistency in education standards.

The sentence is missing the indefinite article 'a' before 'government institution' and 'uniform curriculum'. Also, 'transferable job' should be plural 'transferable jobs' to match the context. The 'There be issue' refers to missing or incorrect use of 'there is/are' or articles in this context.

× My school is located in my hometown and it is in government institution that primarily admits children of government employees who are in transferable job and it follows uniform curriculum to maintain consistency in education standards.

✓ My school is located in my hometown and it is a government institution that primarily admits children of government employees who are in transferable jobs and it follows a uniform curriculum to maintain consistency in education standards.

The phrase 'transferable job' should be plural 'transferable jobs' because it refers to multiple employees having transferable jobs. Also, 'uniform curriculum' should be preceded by 'a' to indicate a singular countable noun.

× Like it has uh, a well equipped library, an excellent Sports Center, music room with lots of musical instruments, and the teachers are also very knowledgeable and supportive.

✓ Like it has uh, a well-equipped library, an excellent Sports Center, a music room with lots of musical instruments, and the teachers are also very knowledgeable and supportive.

The phrase 'music room' is a singular countable noun and requires the article 'a' before it. Also, 'well equipped' should be hyphenated as 'well-equipped' when used as an adjective before a noun.

× Yes, I believe my ex my school is an excellent place to study because it offers a wide range of courses that caters the need of diverse students.

✓ Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study because it offers a wide range of courses that cater to the needs of diverse students.

The verb 'caters' should be 'cater' to agree with the plural subject 'courses'. Also, 'need' should be plural 'needs' because it refers to multiple students' needs. The phrase 'cater to' requires the preposition 'to'.

× Yes, I believe my ex my school is an excellent place to study because it offers a wide range of courses that caters the need of diverse students.

✓ Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study because it offers a wide range of courses that cater to the needs of diverse students.

The verb 'cater' requires the preposition 'to' when indicating the object it serves. Omitting 'to' is incorrect usage of prepositions.

× Does the environment of my school is very competitive as well as uh, supportive and creative?

✓ The environment of my school is very competitive as well as uh, supportive and creative.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'Does' at the beginning, which is unnecessary and incorrect for a statement. The correct form is a simple declarative sentence starting with 'The environment'. This is a 'There be issue' as it relates to incorrect sentence structure involving 'there is/are' or auxiliary verbs.

× Uh in my school there are lots of extra curricular activities which provides students and a chance to showcase their talents and cater to their interests.

✓ Uh in my school there are lots of extracurricular activities which provide students a chance to showcase their talents and cater to their interests.

The plural subject 'activities' requires the plural verb 'provide' instead of 'provides'. Also, 'extracurricular' is one word. The phrase 'students and a chance' is incorrect; it should be 'students a chance' without 'and'.

× Uh in my school there are lots of extra curricular activities which provides students and a chance to showcase their talents and cater to their interests.

✓ Uh in my school there are lots of extracurricular activities which provide students a chance to showcase their talents and cater to their interests.

The phrase 'provides students and a chance' is incorrect; it should be 'provide students a chance'. The preposition 'and' is incorrectly used here, which affects the meaning and structure.

× In my opinion, interest is crucial in studies because when a student in genuinely interested in a subject, they tend to understand and retain the information more easily, and interest motivates the students to pay more attention and engage actively with the material.

✓ In my opinion, interest is crucial in studies because when a student is genuinely interested in a subject, he or she tends to understand and retain the information more easily, and interest motivates the students to pay more attention and engage actively with the material.

The pronoun 'in' is incorrect; it should be 'is'. Also, 'they' is used as a singular pronoun here, which is acceptable in modern English but can be replaced with 'he or she' for formal correctness. The error is mainly the missing verb 'is' after 'student'.