School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and contains grammatical errors. Try to respond directly and clearly, for example, specify the type of school and use correct sentence structures. Avoid redundancy and keep your answer concise.

例: My elementary school is near my house, so I usually take the bus to get there.

提案: Your answer is positive but has grammatical mistakes and incomplete sentences. Use correct verb forms and complete your thoughts. Also, try to add linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: Yes, I do. I have made good friends at my school, and the teachers are knowledgeable and supportive because they always provide helpful information when I need assistance.

提案: Your answer addresses the question but contains grammatical errors and awkward phrasing. Use correct verb forms and more precise vocabulary. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: Yes, I do. My school provides facilities that help students learn effectively. For example, the library is very large, and the teachers are very supportive.

提案: Your answer has good content but contains grammatical errors and awkward sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas and correct grammar to improve clarity.

例: My school is located in the town centre, so it is quite busy in the morning. However, inside the school, there is plenty of space for students to do physical activities.

提案: Your answer is too brief and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to give a clear topic sentence and support it with reasons or examples, using correct grammar and linking words.

例: I believe interest is very important in studying because when I am interested in a subject, I learn better and stay motivated to study more.

× My school I'm not sure what type of school but I will mentioned about the elementary school.

✓ My school, I'm not sure what type of school it is, but I will mention the elementary school.

The original sentence lacks proper sentence structure and punctuation, causing confusion. Adding commas and the verb 'is' clarifies the meaning. 'Mentioned' should be 'mention' to match the present tense context.

× I will mentioned about the elementary school.

✓ I will mention the elementary school.

'Mentioned' is the past participle form and incorrect after 'will' which requires the base form of the verb. The correct form is 'mention'.

× It's near my house so I can take a bus to go to the school.

✓ It's near my house so I can take a bus to go to school.

The definite article 'the' before 'school' is unnecessary when speaking generally about going to school.

× I make a good friends in my school.

✓ I make good friends in my school.

'Friends' is plural, so 'a' should be removed to correct the plural noun usage.

× The teacher is so knowledgeable and supportive when I need help they are providing the informations and.

✓ The teachers are so knowledgeable and supportive. When I need help, they provide information.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match 'they'. 'Informations' is uncountable and should be 'information'. The sentence is also fragmented and needs to be split for clarity.

× The teacher is so knowledgeable and supportive when I need help they are providing the informations and.

✓ The teachers are so knowledgeable and supportive. When I need help, they provide information.

The original sentence is a run-on and incomplete. Splitting into two sentences improves clarity and grammatical correctness.

× my school is provide the facility that can help you to learn well.

✓ My school provides facilities that can help you learn well.

'Is provide' is incorrect; the correct verb form is 'provides' for third person singular present tense. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities' to match the context.

× The teacher is supportive and the facility such as the library is very huge.

✓ The teachers are supportive and the facilities, such as the library, are very large.

'Teacher' should be plural 'teachers' to match the context. 'Facility' should be plural 'facilities'. 'Huge' is better replaced with 'large' for describing size in this context.

× My school is located in the middle of the town so it's quite busy at the morning, but when you get into the school is have more space that provide the student to do a physical activity.

✓ My school is located in the middle of the town, so it's quite busy in the morning. But when you get into the school, there is more space that provides students with opportunities to do physical activities.

The original sentence is a run-on with incorrect verb forms and prepositions. Adding commas, correcting verb forms ('is have' to 'there is'), and prepositions ('at the morning' to 'in the morning') improves clarity and grammar.

× it's quite busy at the morning

✓ it's quite busy in the morning

The correct preposition for times of day like 'morning' is 'in', not 'at'.

× when you get into the school is have more space

✓ when you get into the school, there is more space

The phrase 'is have' is incorrect. The correct structure is 'there is' to indicate existence.

× that provide the student to do a physical activity.

✓ that provide students with opportunities to do physical activities.

'The student' should be plural 'students' to match general meaning. Also, 'to do a physical activity' is better expressed as 'with opportunities to do physical activities' for natural English.

× Personally experienced, I will learn better if I interest in this.

✓ From personal experience, I learn better if I am interested in it.

'Personally experienced' is incorrect; 'From personal experience' is the correct phrase. 'I interest in this' should be 'I am interested in it' to use the correct verb and pronoun.