School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to directly state the location of your school and how you commute there, using clear and correct sentences. Avoid redundancy and ensure coherence.

例: My school is the University of New South Wales, located in Sydney. Every day, I take the light rail to get there, and I usually get off at either the L2 or L3 stop, both of which are close to the campus.

提案: Your answer has some good points but lacks clarity and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your opinion clearly, support it with specific reasons, and use linking words to connect ideas.

例: Yes, I like my school because it is very prestigious, ranking 19th in the QS World University Rankings. Moreover, the campus offers a lot of freedom, allowing students to explore different areas comfortably.

提案: Your answer is relevant but contains filler words and some grammatical errors. Try to speak more fluently, avoid fillers, and provide specific reasons with linking words to improve coherence.

例: Yes, I believe my school is a good place to study because the library provides a quiet environment where I can review my assignments and plan my reports effectively.

提案: Your answer is vague and contains many hesitations. Try to describe the environment clearly with specific details and use linking words to make your answer coherent.

例: The University of New South Wales has many green plants and numerous buildings on campus. Usually, when I feel tired after studying, I like to relax in the spacious outdoor areas and enjoy the surroundings.

提案: Your answer has a good idea but is unclear and contains grammatical errors and fillers. Try to express your opinion clearly, use correct grammar, and provide reasons with linking words.

例: I think having an interest in studying is very important because it makes learning enjoyable rather than a challenge. Since I am interested in my studies, I am motivated to put in my best effort.

× My school is the UNSW shows everyday I will take light road to the USW so there are two stops for my school so I can take the L2 or L3 to around my school.

✓ My school is UNSW. Every day, I take Light Rail to UNSW. There are two stops near my school, so I can take the L2 or L3 around my school.

The original sentence is a run-on sentence with unclear structure and incorrect word usage. Breaking it into shorter sentences improves clarity. 'Shows' is incorrect here; it should be omitted. 'Light road' should be 'Light Rail'. 'USW' is a typo for 'UNSW'. 'To around my school' is awkward; 'around my school' is sufficient.

× Yes, I like my school because I think UNSW is a very famous school and in the QS ranking he it also gets a 19 very good ranking. And so it's also is a very freedom places I can go around everywhere.

✓ Yes, I like my school because I think UNSW is a very famous school and in the QS ranking, it also gets a very good ranking of 19. Also, it is a very free place where I can go anywhere.

The pronouns 'he it' are incorrect and redundant; 'it' is the correct pronoun for UNSW. 'Freedom places' is incorrect; 'free place' or 'a place with freedom' is appropriate. The sentence structure is awkward and needs rephrasing for clarity.

× Yes, I think my school is a good place to study cause uh, every day I will stay in the library to uh, review, review my assignments and consider about how to start my uh, report. So it's quite a good places to study I think.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because every day I stay in the library to review my assignments and think about how to start my report. So, it's quite a good place to study, I think.

'Places' should be singular 'place' because it refers to 'my school' which is singular. 'Cause' is informal; 'because' is better. 'Consider about' is incorrect; 'think about' or 'consider' is correct.

× Umm, USW has lots of uh plans and UH have lots of uh buildings in the campus. So uh, normally when I feel tired after studying I will go to the uh, uh, big places to have a rest and see around.

✓ Umm, UNSW has lots of plants and lots of buildings on the campus. So normally, when I feel tired after studying, I go to big places to rest and look around.

'USW' and 'UH' are typos for 'UNSW'. 'Plans' should be 'plants'. 'Have' should be 'has' to agree with singular 'UNSW'. 'In the campus' should be 'on the campus'. 'See around' is awkward; 'look around' is better.

× I think uh only, uh, interesting in studying. They will not thinking about study is a challenge or hard thing. Because I'm interested in studying, I will uh, uh, provide all effort to study everything.

✓ I think only those who are interested in studying will not think of studying as a challenge or a hard thing. Because I'm interested in studying, I will put all my effort into studying everything.

'Interesting in studying' should be 'interested in studying' to correctly use the adjective. 'They will not thinking' should be 'will not think'. 'Provide all effort' is incorrect; 'put all my effort' is correct. 'Study everything' is better expressed as 'studying everything'.