School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer provides the location and name of your school, but it is somewhat unclear and slightly redundant. Try to make your sentences more concise and natural by avoiding unnecessary repetition and improving sentence structure.

例: My school, Saint Patrick's School, is located in the southern area of Karachi, near the UH British Library.

提案: Your answer is heartfelt and detailed, but it is a bit long and contains some grammatical errors. Try to use linking words to connect ideas smoothly and keep your answer within 5 sentences.

例: Yes, I love my school because I spent over 14 years there, and it felt like a second home. Moreover, I made lasting friendships and had great experiences with both teachers and classmates.

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but you can improve coherence by using linking words and more precise vocabulary. Also, avoid informal expressions like 'super supportive' in formal speaking tests.

例: Yes, I believe my school is an excellent place to study because it is one of the most prestigious schools in Karachi. Furthermore, the teachers are very supportive, so I would definitely recommend it to others.

提案: Your answer provides good points but is somewhat repetitive and contains grammatical errors. Try to organize your ideas clearly using linking words and avoid redundancy.

例: The environment at my school is very friendly because the teachers are cooperative. Additionally, unlike other schools, there are no strict dress codes, which helps students feel comfortable while studying.

提案: Your answer addresses the question well but is a bit repetitive and contains grammatical mistakes. Try to express your ideas more concisely and use linking words to improve flow.

例: I believe interest in studying is very important because without it, students may lack motivation, which can lead to poor grades or even failure.

× My school is located in southern area near UH British Library and UH name of my school is UH Saint Patrick's Schools, Karachi.

✓ My school is located in the southern area near UH British Library and the name of my school is UH Saint Patrick's Schools, Karachi.

The definite article 'the' is required before 'southern area' and 'name' because they refer to specific known entities. Omitting 'the' here is incorrect.

× I made a few friends from school which are even now connected with me and I had a very great experience at my school with my teachers and my colleagues.

✓ I made a few friends from school who are even now connected with me and I had a very great experience at my school with my teachers and my colleagues.

The relative pronoun 'which' is used for things, while 'who' is used for people. Since 'friends' refers to people, 'who' should be used instead of 'which'.

× Teachers are super supportive and I think I should recommend people to study there.

✓ Teachers are super supportive and I think I should recommend people study there.

The verb 'recommend' is followed directly by the base form of the verb without 'to'. Using 'to study' after 'recommend' is incorrect.

× Well environment in my school is super friendly and there's no strict temperature rules which different schools has and since teachers are very cooperative and they make the environment very friendly and student can enjoy and study at the same time.

✓ Well, the environment in my school is super friendly and there are no strict temperature rules which different schools have and since teachers are very cooperative, they make the environment very friendly and students can enjoy and study at the same time.

'Environment' is singular and requires 'the' before it. 'Rules' is plural, so 'there are' is correct instead of 'there's'. Also, 'schools' is plural, so the verb should be 'have' not 'has'. 'Student' should be plural 'students' to match the context.

× Well environment in my school is super friendly and there's no strict temperature rules which different schools has and since teachers are very cooperative and they make the environment very friendly and student can enjoy and study at the same time.

✓ Well, the environment in my school is super friendly and there are no strict temperature rules which different schools have and since teachers are very cooperative, they make the environment very friendly and students can enjoy and study at the same time.

The definite article 'the' is needed before 'environment' because it refers to a specific environment. Also, 'student' should be plural 'students' to agree with the context.

× I think it's highly important to take interest in studies because if one is not interested in studying, it could affect a negatively affect their grades because they will have lack of motivations to study due to lack of interest and they will end it up failing or getting low grades.

✓ I think it's highly important to take an interest in studies because if one is not interested in studying, it could negatively affect their grades because they will lack motivation to study due to lack of interest and they may end up failing or getting low grades.

The phrase 'take interest' should be 'take an interest'. 'Affect a negatively affect' is redundant; only 'negatively affect' is needed. 'Lack of motivations' should be 'lack of motivation' (uncountable). 'End it up failing' is incorrect; correct phrase is 'end up failing'. Also, 'may' is better than 'will' to express possibility.