School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to give a clear and concise answer without filler words like 'umm' and 'uh'. Also, provide more specific information about your school, such as its name and key features, to make your answer more informative and natural.

例: My school is located in Macau, a special administrative region in southeast China. It is known as City University and is famous for its diverse student community and modern facilities.

提案: Avoid filler words and grammatical errors. Use linking words like 'on the one hand' and 'on the other hand' correctly, and provide more specific examples to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I like my school very much. On the one hand, it offers many opportunities to interact with people from diverse backgrounds. On the other hand, it has a strong reputation for academic excellence.

提案: Reduce hesitation and improve grammar, such as subject-verb agreement. Use linking words like 'firstly' and 'secondly' to organize your points clearly. Provide more precise descriptions to enhance your answer.

例: Yes, I think my school is a good place to study. Firstly, the students are polite and supportive of each other. Secondly, the library has a strong learning atmosphere, with many hardworking students studying there.

提案: Avoid excessive hesitation and repetition. Provide a clear and structured answer with linking words. Describe the environment more vividly and explain why it is limited.

例: The environment at my school is quite limited because Macau is a small and expensive area. Therefore, the campus consists of only four buildings, making it compact but efficient.

提案: Clarify your ideas and avoid confusing phrases. Use correct vocabulary and grammar to express your opinion clearly. Explain why interest is important in studying with specific reasons.

例: In my opinion, having interest in your studies is very important. For example, if you want to become a journalist or an expert in your field, you need to be dedicated and enjoy learning every day.

× There is very, it's also been known as a City University.

✓ It is also known as a City University.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'There is very' which is incomplete and confusing. The correct structure is 'It is also known as a City University.' to properly introduce the fact.

× my school provide provided a lot of chance for us to interact with, uh, many kinds of person

✓ my school provides a lot of chances for us to interact with many kinds of people

The subject 'my school' is singular, so the verb should be 'provides' (third person singular). Also, 'chance' should be plural 'chances' to match 'a lot of', and 'person' should be plural 'people' when referring to many individuals.

× the students in our school is all polite and also very kind to each other.

✓ the students in our school are all polite and also very kind to each other.

The subject 'students' is plural, so the verb should be 'are' instead of 'is' to agree in number.

× there has a, a very, uh, thick, uh, learning atmosphere in the library.

✓ there is a very thick learning atmosphere in the library.

The correct form is 'there is' when introducing a singular noun phrase. 'There has' is incorrect in this context.

× there are lots of hardworking students and reading in there.

✓ there are lots of hardworking students reading in there.

The verb 'reading' here functions as a participle modifying 'students' and should not be connected with 'and' as a separate verb. Removing 'and' makes the sentence grammatically correct.

× just few, just just four buildings because the, the, umm, uh, the area is limited in Macau

✓ just a few, just four buildings because the area is limited in Macau

The phrase 'just few' is incorrect; it should be 'just a few' to indicate a small number. Also, repeated words 'just just' are redundant and should be removed.

× you need to devote it yourself into the study every day.

✓ you need to devote yourself to the study every day.

The verb 'devote' is correctly followed by 'to' plus the object. 'Devote yourself into' is incorrect; the correct preposition is 'to'.