School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Câu trả lời đúng trọng tâm nhưng cần chỉnh ngữ pháp (ví dụ mạo từ và viết số đường), giảm thừa từ và thêm một hoặc hai chi tiết cụ thể để tự nhiên hơn. Hãy nói rõ hơn về vị trí bằng mạo từ phù hợp và tránh lỗi về cách viết số đường.

例: My school is on 110th Street, near the Northern Market in Hanoi. It’s only a ten-minute walk from my home, so it’s very convenient for me.

提案: Cần sửa lỗi ngữ pháp (động từ, số ít/ số nhiều), loại bỏ âm ừm (filler) và tránh lặp từ. Nên có câu chủ đề rõ ràng, sau đó thêm 1-2 chi tiết cụ thể (ví dụ tên câu lạc bộ hoặc hoạt động) để minh họa.

例: Yes, I really like my school because the teachers are very supportive and my classmates are friendly. For example, I joined the debate club and the photography club, which helped me improve my communication skills.

提案: Cần tránh các cụm từ mơ hồ như “kind of” và fillers như “uh”. Sửa ngữ pháp (articles, verb forms) và làm câu mạch lạc bằng cách dùng liên từ phù hợp. Thêm minh chứng cụ thể (ví dụ phương pháp giảng dạy hoặc thành tích học sinh).

例: I believe my school is a good place to study because it’s one of the most prestigious high schools in Hanoi, and teachers use interactive lessons to help students understand difficult topics. As a result, many students achieve high exam scores.

提案: Câu có lặp và lỗi ngữ pháp, câu bị dang dở. Tránh lặp từ, hoàn thành ý và dùng từ miêu tả chính xác hơn (e.g., "slightly polluted"), kèm ví dụ cụ thể về ảnh hưởng (mùi, tiếng ồn).

例: The environment at my school is okay but slightly polluted because it’s next to a market. For example, there is often a strong smell of fish and a lot of traffic noise during the day.

提案: Ý rõ nhưng cần sửa ngữ pháp và cách diễn đạt (e.g., "interest in studying"), bỏ filler và cải thiện logic câu cuối bằng ví dụ hoặc giải thích cụ thể về cách hứng thú ảnh hưởng đến kết quả học tập.

例: I think interest in studying is very important because it keeps us motivated and helps develop self-discipline. For instance, when I enjoyed learning history, I spent more time reading and my grades improved.

× My school is located in the 110th street near the Northern Market in Hanoi.

✓ My school is located on 110th Street near the Northern Market in Hanoi.

The preposition 'on' is used with street names in English. 'the' before '110th street' is unnecessary; 'Street' should be capitalized as part of a proper noun. Use 'on 110th Street' rather than 'in the 110th street'.

× I really love my school since the teacher here is are really supportive and our friends are really friendly UMM.

✓ I really love my school since the teachers here are really supportive and our friends are really friendly.

Subject-verb agreement error: 'teacher' singular does not match 'are'. Use plural 'teachers' with 'are'. Also remove filler 'UMM'.

× Additionally, my schools also have many clubs and extracurricular activities which makes UMM our time.

✓ Additionally, my school also has many clubs and extracurricular activities which make our time enjoyable.

'My schools' should be singular 'my school' to match context. Verb agreement: 'activities' plural requires 'make' not 'makes'. 'UMM' is a filler and removed; added 'enjoyable' to complete thought.

× I think my school is kind of a good place to study since it's one of the most prestigious high school in Hanoi.

✓ I think my school is kind of a good place to study since it's one of the most prestigious high schools in Hanoi.

Countable noun 'high school' in this comparative phrase should be plural 'high schools' because 'one of the' is followed by a plural noun.

× And uh, the teachers here are really good as good at guiding us and help us to understand the lessons.

✓ The teachers here are really good at guiding us and helping us to understand the lessons.

Remove filler 'And uh'. 'good as good at' is redundant and incorrect. Parallel structure requires gerunds: 'guiding' and 'helping'. Use 'helping us' rather than 'help us' to match 'guiding'.

× While the environment at my school is not really the best, it's still a bit polluted since it since it's located near a market so there are many smell of fish and.

✓ Although the environment at my school is not the best, it is a bit polluted because it is located near a market, so there are many smells of fish.

Avoid repeated 'since'. Use 'Although' or 'While' correctly and 'because' to state reason. 'it since it's' is redundant. 'Smell' should be plural 'smells of fish'. Remove trailing 'and'.

× I think interest in study is really significant since this helps to keep us motivated and to help us to be self disciplined.

✓ I think interest in studying is really significant since it helps keep us motivated and helps us become self-disciplined.

Use the gerund 'interest in studying'. 'this' more naturally 'it'. Parallel verbs: 'helps keep' and 'helps us become'. 'self disciplined' should be hyphenated 'self-disciplined'.

× Uh, and if you don't like studying, you couldn't study.

✓ If you don't like studying, you won't be able to study well.

'Couldn't' is past tense or conditional; use future/modal 'won't be able to' or 'cannot' to express consequence in present/future. Added 'well' to clarify meaning and make sentence natural.