School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: 文法と語順、語彙選択を改善してください。例えば“they have many student”は“it has many students”にし、“they help big”は意味不明なので“the staff are very helpful”など具体的に言い換えると自然になります。短く一つの主旨に絞り、文を明確に分けましょう。

例: My school is in Japan. It is a private high school with many students, and the staff are very helpful.

提案: 理由を述べるときの時制と語彙、そして冗長な繰り返しを避けることに注意してください。“I got many friends”は現在形で“I have many friends”が適切です。また“a lot of memory”より“many great memories”の方が自然です。接続詞を使って情報を整理しましょう。

例: Yes, I do. I have many friends at my high school, and I have many great memories, such as going out with them and studying together.

提案: 理由を述べる際に主語と複数形、前置詞を正しく使い、語順を整えましょう。“they have many teachers”は良いですが“supportive to student for study”は不自然です。“supportive of students’ learning”のように言い換えてください。短く明瞭に。

例: Yes, I think so. It is a private school with many teachers, and they are very supportive of students’ learning.

提案: 情報の整理と語彙選択を改善してください。繰り返し（private, they have）は避け、施設の名称は正確に（library, lunchroom, computer room）。“They have lived”は意味不明なので“library”とするなど明確に。接続語で文をつなげてください。

例: My high school is a modern private school. It has a well-equipped library, a lunchroom and a computer room, so the environment is good for studying.

提案: 表現を自然にし、語形と語順を正しく使いましょう。“to interested in study”は文法的に誤りで“I’m interested in studying”や“being interested in study”を使います。“survive in this world”は少し大げさなので“succeed”や“get good opportunities”など具体的にするとよいです。

例: I think being interested in studying is very important because it helps people learn useful skills and get better opportunities in life.

× My school is in Japan and my high school is private and they have many student and they help big.

✓ My school is in Japan. My high school is private, and it has many students and helps a lot.

文中で名詞の単数・複数形が誤って使われています。'they have many student' は主語が単数の 'my high school' なので動詞は単数形にし、'student' は複数形の 'students' にする必要があります。また 'they help big' は意味と語法が不自然なので 'helps a lot' のように表現を修正します。 改善案: 主語と名詞の数を一致させる（単数主語には単数動詞、名詞は適切な単複を使う）こと、慣用表現を使って自然な言い回しにすること。

× Yes I do because I got many friends in my high school. I have a lot of memory such as going out with my friend and study hard with my friend thus.

✓ Yes, I do because I have many friends at my high school. I have a lot of memories, such as going out with my friends and studying hard with them.

'I got many friends' は時制と語法が不自然で 'I have many friends' が適切です。'going out with my friend and study hard' は並列の形が揃っていないため、動名詞を揃えて 'going out ... and studying ...' とします。また 'my friend' は複数を指すので 'my friends' または代名詞 'them' を使います。 改善案: 同じ構造の動詞や名詞を並べるときは形を揃える（動名詞/不定詞など）、単数/複数の一致に注意する。

× Yes I think so because my school is private and they have many teachers they are so supportive to student for study.

✓ Yes, I think so because my school is private and it has many teachers who are very supportive of students' studies.

'my school' は単数なので 'they have' ではなく 'it has' とします。'supportive to student for study' は不自然な前置詞と単数形の使用があるため、'supportive of students' studies' のように修正します。 改善案: 主語が単数か複数かを確認しそれに合わせた動詞を使う。'supportive' の後は 'of' を使うのが一般的で、目的語の数も適切にする。

× My high school is private and they have they are so modern private high school.

✓ My high school is private; it is a very modern school.

文中で代名詞 'they' が単数の 'my high school' を指すため不適切に使われています。また重複した語句があり冗長です。単数には 'it' を使い、簡潔に表現します。 改善案: 代名詞は先行する名詞の数（単数/複数）に合わせる。冗長な語句は省く。

× They have lived and lunchroom and PC room.

✓ They have a library, a lunchroom, and a computer room.

'lived' は名詞として不適切で、恐らく 'library'（図書館）を意図しています。また 'PC room' はより自然な 'computer room' に直し、冠詞 'a' を付けて複数の施設を列挙します。 改善案: 意図する名詞を正しく使い、可算名詞には適切な冠詞を付けて並列する。

× Their environment is so good for study.

✓ The environment there is very good for studying.

'Their environment' は学校を指すなら 'The environment there' の方が自然です。また 'for study' より動名詞 'for studying' を使うのが自然です。 改善案: 所有代名詞の使い方を見直し、'for + 動名詞' を使って目的を表現する。

× I think it's really important to interested in study because study is very important to help people to survive in this world.

✓ I think it's really important to be interested in studying because studying is important to help people survive in this world.

'to interested' は不定詞の後に過去分詞形が来ており誤りで、'to be interested' とする必要があります。また 'interested in study' は 'interested in studying'、'study is very important to help people to survive' は 'studying is important to help people survive' のように自然な語順と動名詞形に直します。 改善案: 'interested' を使う際は 'be interested in + 名詞/動名詞' という形を守る。'to' 不定詞と動名詞の使い分けに注意する。