School— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear and direct. Begin with a topic sentence stating where your school or university is located, avoid irrelevant or confused phrases, and provide one or two specific supporting details (city, campus features). Keep to 1–3 simple sentences and use linking words if adding details.

例: I studied at a university in Kyoto, Japan. It is situated near the city center and has a compact campus with traditional buildings and modern facilities.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and expand briefly with specific reasons using linking words. Avoid filler sounds. Limit to 2–3 sentences, and use vocabulary like "resources" or "facilities."

例: Yes, I liked my school because it had excellent resources. For example, there was a large library with many books and quiet study spaces, which helped me with research.

提案: Answer directly and give concrete reasons. Use linking words such as "because" or "since" and complete your sentences. Provide 1–2 specific points about why it is good (facilities, teachers, atmosphere).

例: Yes, I believe it was a good place to study because the teachers were supportive and the campus had quiet study areas. Also, small class sizes made it easier to ask questions.

提案: Start with a clear topic sentence describing the environment, then add specific details and use linking words like "and" or "so". Mention concrete features (lake, labs, quiet atmosphere) and avoid hesitations.

例: The environment at my school was peaceful and scenic. It was located next to a lake, and because it had modern science labs and quiet study spots, it was an ideal place for science students.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with reasons and an example. Use linking words such as "because" and expand with one or two specific consequences of being interested (motivation, better results). Avoid fillers.

例: Interest is very important for studying because it increases motivation and helps you concentrate. For instance, when I was curious about a topic, I spent more time researching it and achieved better grades.

× I graduated. Let's make a university in Japan, uh.

✓ I graduated. I attended university in Japan.

The student used 'Let's make a university in Japan' which is incorrect for describing past attendance. This is a past tense/context meaning action already completed; use 'attended university' to indicate past study. Suggestion: use simple past verbs (attended, studied) to describe past education.

× This is located in Kyoto and the sugar.

✓ It is located in Kyoto and near the station.

'The sugar' is not meaningful in context and likely a mispronunciation of 'the station' or similar. Also 'This is located in Kyoto' should use 'It is located in Kyoto' for natural reference. Use preposition 'near' to indicate proximity. Suggestion: check intended noun and use appropriate preposition (in Kyoto, near the station).

× Yeah, I like my school because, uh. It has a lot of books and uh has a big library and uh.

✓ Yes, I like my school because it has a lot of books and a big library.

The sentence fragments and repeated 'has' are awkward. Use a single clause 'it has' followed by coordinated objects. Ensure third person singular verb 'has' is used once and articles are included ('a big library'). Suggestion: combine ideas into one fluid sentence and include articles.

× Yes, I think my school is a good place to study, uh, because. MMM, student. It's, uh, cool. And the campus is.

✓ Yes, I think my school is a good place to study because the students are motivated, it's a nice environment, and the campus is well maintained.

Original contains sentence fragments and incomplete clauses ('because.' 'The campus is.'). Repair by completing the 'because' clause with reasons and finish the campus description. Suggestion: avoid fragments; complete the thought after 'because' and describe 'campus is' with an adjective or phrase.

× My school is uh, located uh, nearby lake and uh, it's good place uh, to study science and uh, quiet.

✓ My school is located near a lake, and it's a good place to study science because it's quiet.

Use 'near' or 'nearby' correctly with noun phrases: 'near a lake' or 'nearby the lake' (informal). Include the article 'a' before 'lake' and 'a' before 'good place'. Connect clauses with 'because' to explain why it's good. Suggestion: ensure correct prepositions and articles and complete the causal link.

× MMM. Interested is very, very important to study because, uh, curious, uh.

✓ Being interested is very important for studying because curiosity helps learning.

'Interested is' is ungrammatical; use the gerund 'Being interested' or 'Interest is' as the subject. Use 'important for studying' or 'important to studying' and clarify the reason: 'curiosity helps learning.' Suggestion: use gerunds or noun forms correctly as subjects and match prepositions ('important for'/'important to').