Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatically correct, concise, and add a clear supporting detail. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct verb tense and article usage, avoid repetition, and add a specific memory or reason using a linking word. Aim for 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. When I was a child I loved riding my bicycle around the village because the roads were quiet and safe, so I often cycled to my friend’s house after school.

提案: Use correct plural and article forms, make the topic sentence direct, and provide a specific example or reason with linking words to support your view. Mention concrete facts (who, where, how) and avoid vague phrasing. Keep it to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country, especially among young people in Bangkok. For example, there are many bike-share schemes and rental services now, so people often use bikes to commute short distances or explore parks during weekends.

× Certainly, yes. When I was young, I really enjoy biking in the in the village.

✓ Certainly, yes. When I was young, I really enjoyed biking in the village.

The sentence mixes past time marker 'When I was young' with present tense verb 'enjoy'. This is a tense inconsistency (present tense issue). Use the past tense 'enjoyed' to match the past time context. Also remove the duplicated 'the' before 'village'. Suggestion: always match verbs to the time frame indicated and proofread for repeated words.

× I think bicycle is very popular in my country, especially in young people like in Bangkok.

✓ I think bicycles are very popular in my country, especially among young people like those in Bangkok.

The noun 'bicycle' should be plural ('bicycles') when referring generally, and the verb must agree ('are'). Also 'in young people' is incorrect; use 'among young people'. 'Like in Bangkok' is unclear; specify 'those in Bangkok' to indicate the people being compared. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general statements and correct prepositional phrases ('among').

× Nowadays it has a bike for rent for traveling in the city.

✓ Nowadays there are bikes for rent for traveling around the city.

The original uses 'it has a bike' which is incorrect in this context. Use the existential 'there are' to state existence of available bikes. Also plural 'bikes' fits general availability. Use 'around the city' rather than 'in the city' for natural phrasing. Suggestion: use 'there is/there are' to introduce existence and match number (singular/plural) appropriately.