Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with verb tense and article use, keep answers concise and add a linking phrase to make it coherent. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, give a specific detail (who gave it, age) and a short result or memory. Avoid small grammatical mistakes (e.g., use past tense 'had', say 'for about seven years').

例: Yes, I had a bicycle that my great-grandfather gave me when I was nine. I used it to ride to school for about seven years, which made my daily commute enjoyable and gave me more independence.

提案: Make the statement precise and support it with specific reasons or examples using linking words. Use plural agreement and avoid absolute claims like 'every single family.' Add one or two supporting details (e.g., affordability, convenience) and a linking word such as 'because' or 'for example'.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they are affordable and practical for short trips. For example, many people use them to commute to work or market stalls, especially in smaller towns.

× I have a bike which was gifted by my great grandfather when I was 9.

✓ I had a bike that was gifted to me by my great-grandfather when I was nine.

The original sentence mixes present perfect (I have) with a past time reference (when I was 9). Use simple past 'I had' to match the past time. Also, 'which' is better as 'that' in restrictive clauses for natural style, and include 'to me' after 'gifted' to show the recipient. Hyphenate 'great-grandfather' and spell out the number 'nine' for formal correctness.

× I still remember I used that bike around 7 years to go to school.

✓ I still remember using that bike for around seven years to go to school.

The phrase 'I used that bike around 7 years' is ungrammatical for duration; use 'using' (verb + -ing) after 'remember' to indicate a past action remembered. Express duration with 'for around seven years' and spell out the number 'seven' in formal writing. This corrects tense and verb form usage.

× Yes, bikes are really common in my country as it is owned by every single family.

✓ Yes, bikes are really common in my country because they are owned by almost every family.

The original uses singular pronoun 'it' to refer to plural 'bikes', causing pronoun-antecedent disagreement. Also 'is owned by every single family' is awkward; use plural 'they are owned' and 'almost every family' is more natural than 'every single family.' Use 'because' for clearer causal connection.