Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Expand the answer with a clear topic sentence and one or two specific supporting details. Keep it natural and concise (no more than 5 sentences). Use linking words if you add more information. For example, say whether it was your own bike, who gave it to you, how often you used it, and a short reason why you remember it.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike that my parents bought me for my seventh birthday, and I used it almost every day after school. Because our neighborhood was quiet, I felt safe riding around with my friends, which is why I remember it so fondly.

提案: Provide a clear topic sentence, then add specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid filler phrases such as “like” and avoid trailing off. Mention concrete facts (e.g., who rides, where, and why) and give a brief reason or example to support your opinion.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country. For instance, many commuters use bicycles to get to work because cities have extensive bike lanes and bike-sharing schemes, so cycling is both convenient and affordable. As a result, you often see groups of people cycling together during rush hour.

× Yes, bikes are popular. I know a few people who ride bikes together and we have like many biking lanes, bicycle lanes here in the city. So I think and I.

✓ Yes, bikes are popular. I know a few people who ride bikes together, and we have many bicycle lanes here in the city. So I think so.

Multiple issues addressed: 1) 'like' used as filler is informal and unnecessary; remove it to be grammatically correct. 2) 'biking lanes, bicycle lanes' is redundant; choose one term such as 'bicycle lanes.' 3) punctuation: add a comma before 'and' to join independent clauses. 4) The final fragment 'So I think and I.' is incomplete and ungrammatical; correct to 'So I think so.' to complete the thought. Suggestions: avoid filler words like 'like' in formal responses, avoid redundancy by using one clear noun phrase, ensure clauses are properly connected with punctuation, and finish fragments with a complete predicate (for example 'I think so' or 'I agree').