Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Content is relevant but language has accuracy and clarity problems. Improve by: 1) Correcting word choice and grammar (e.g., 'had the shame' -> 'felt too shy' or 'was too embarrassed'; 'light in the neighborhood' -> 'ride around the neighborhood'); 2) Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., 'Although I didn't own a bike, I often borrowed one from a friend. For example,...'); 3) Keep answers concise (no more than 4–5 sentences) and use varied vocabulary (borrow, ride, neighborhood, weekend ritual).

例: Although I didn’t own a bike as a child, I often borrowed one from a friend. For example, every weekend we would ride around the neighborhood for an hour, which was great fun. Those rides helped me become confident on a bike and made me enjoy cycling.

提案: Answer is clear and well-structured with relevant supporting reasons. To improve further: 1) Add a linking phrase to introduce reasons (e.g., 'mainly because'); 2) Provide one specific example or brief comparison to strengthen the point (e.g., mention crowded roads or seasonal rain); 3) Use a slightly wider range of vocabulary (e.g., 'predominantly', 'unfavourable conditions'). Keep it concise and natural.

例: No, bikes are not very popular in Thailand, mainly because the weather is often very hot and humid and the roads are crowded. For example, many main streets are dominated by cars and motorcycles, which makes cycling unsafe. As a result, most people prefer private cars or public transport.

× I didn't have a bike when I was young, but I often had the shame to cycle with my friends at their house.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was young, but I was often too ashamed to cycle with my friends at their house.

The phrase 'had the shame' is incorrect English. The correct expression is 'was ashamed' or 'was too ashamed' to do something. This is a past tense copular construction using 'was' + adjective (ashamed). Also add 'too' if the meaning is inability due to shame. Suggestion: use 'was (too) ashamed to + base verb' for similar contexts.

× We used to light in the neighborhood every weekend, which was great fun and helped me learn to like well.

✓ We used to ride around the neighborhood every weekend, which was great fun and helped me learn to enjoy it.

'Used to light' is incorrect; the intended meaning is likely 'ride' (past habitual action). 'Learn to like well' is ungrammatical: 'learn to enjoy it' or 'learn to like it' are correct. The sentence structure needed a clear verb ('ride around') and a correct infinitive phrase ('learn to enjoy it'). Suggestion: replace incorrect verb with the appropriate activity verb and use 'learn to enjoy it' for expressing developed liking.