Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with accuracy, conciseness and natural wording. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (e.g., “my aunt bought me a bike”), and avoid impossible claims (learning to ride at one year old sounds unlikely). Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. Keep to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My aunt bought it for me when I was about five, and I practiced in the park every afternoon. As a result, I learned to ride confidently within a few weeks.

提案: Improve fluency and coherence by using correct articles and complete sentences, removing fillers (uh), and finishing thoughts. Begin with a topic sentence, then give a specific reason and an example using linking words (for example, therefore). Keep it clear and avoid repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in China, especially because of bike‑sharing schemes. For example, people can simply scan a QR code on a shared bike and ride it for short trips, which makes cycling convenient and affordable.

× When I was just one year old, my auntie spent bought me a bike and I learned to ride it very quickly.

✓ When I was just one year old, my auntie bought me a bike and I learned to ride it very quickly.

The student used 'spent bought' which is incorrect; 'bought' is the simple past form of 'buy' and is sufficient. Remove 'spent' to form a correct past-tense sentence. Suggestion: use 'bought' alone for completed past actions.

× Yes, I think bike is popular in China, especially when now there are a lot of share bikes.

✓ Yes, I think bikes are popular in China, especially now that there are a lot of shared bikes.

The noun 'bike' should be plural ('bikes') to match the general statement; the verb must agree ('are'). 'When now' is awkward; use 'especially now that' or 'especially because now' and 'share bikes' should be 'shared bikes' or 'bike sharing services'. Suggestion: use plural nouns for general facts and linkers like 'now that' for current situations.

× Anyone can uh just don't have to own a bike.

✓ Anyone doesn't have to own a bike.

The original mixes negative and modal forms incorrectly ('can' followed by 'don't have to'). Use either 'doesn't have to' or 'does not need to' for general obligation, or 'can' plus a base verb: 'Anyone can use one without owning a bike.' Suggestion: choose one correct structure and avoid combining 'can' with 'don't'.

× You can just scan the QR code and then you can.

✓ You can just scan the QR code and then ride it.

The sentence ends incompletely with 'and then you can.' It needs a main verb after 'can' to complete the idea. Based on context, 'ride it' completes the meaning. Suggestion: always include the verb after modal verbs like 'can' to avoid sentence fragments.