Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammatical accuracy, use past tense consistently, reduce repetition, and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two specific supporting details. Use linking words (e.g., "but," "so," "however") correctly. Also vary vocabulary (e.g., "borrowed" rather than "kinda borrowed") and avoid fillers.

例: No, I didn't have a bicycle when I was a child because my parents couldn't afford one. Instead, I often borrowed a bike from our neighbors so I could learn how to ride it, and I practiced in the park every weekend.

提案: Make the response grammatically correct, give a clear topic sentence, then add a specific reason or example. Use plural agreement ("they are popular") and a linking word to expand. Avoid trailing off; finish your thought with a concrete detail.

例: Yes, I think bicycles are quite popular in my country because many students use them to commute to school. For example, in my neighborhood you can see groups of students cycling every morning, which is cheaper and faster than taking the bus.

× No, I don't have a bicycle because my parents can't afford it so so that I kinda borrowed bike to our neighbors so that I can try how to maneuver it.

✓ No, I didn't have a bicycle because my parents couldn't afford one, so I kind of borrowed a bike from our neighbors so I could try how to ride it.

Multiple tense and auxiliary errors: the question was about the past ('when you were a child') so present-tense 'don't have' and 'can't afford' should be past-tense 'didn't have' and 'couldn't afford'. 'kinda' is informal; use 'kind of' or 'kind of' is acceptable but 'kind of' is better in writing. Word order and prepositions: use 'borrowed a bike from our neighbors' not 'borrowed bike to our neighbors'. Use 'could' (past ability/possibility) instead of 'can' to match past context. 'Try how to maneuver it' is awkward; 'try how to ride it' or 'learn to ride it' is natural. Suggestions: align verb tenses to past when referring to past events, use correct auxiliary verbs (did/didn't, could/couldn't), use 'borrow from' for borrowing, and choose natural verbs ('ride' or 'learn to ride') instead of 'maneuver.'

× Yes, it's popular to my country because I see most students here are using bikes and.

✓ Yes, bicycles are popular in my country because I see most students here using bikes.

Errors include incorrect structure 'it's popular to my country' — use 'popular in my country.' 'It's' refers to a singular subject; better to use plural 'bicycles are' or 'cycling is.' The phrase 'I see most students here are using bikes and.' ends with an extraneous 'and' and unnecessary progressive aspect; simplify to 'I see most students here using bikes.' Suggestions: use 'in' with locations, match singular/plural appropriately, remove trailing conjunctions, and use concise phrasing like 'bicycles are popular in my country' or 'cycling is popular in my country.'