Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more concise and avoid repetition. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add one brief supporting detail (when or who taught you). Use linking words if adding a second detail. Keep to 2–3 sentences and correct minor hesitations.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it when I was about seven, and my older cousin taught me by running alongside until I found my balance.

提案: Provide a direct opinion followed by specific reasons and, if possible, a brief contrast or example. Use linking words (because, however, for example) and correct small grammar (use 'hot and humid' and 'uncomfortable'). Keep answers to 2–3 sentences.

例: I don't think cycling is very popular in Indonesia because the weather is often hot and humid, which makes long rides uncomfortable. For example, many people prefer motorbikes for short trips since they are faster and offer shade.

× Uh, yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. In fact, I I learned how to ride a bike when I was a child.

✓ Uh, yes, I did have a bike when I was a child. In fact, I learned how to ride it when I was young.

This sentence shows a repetition ('I I') and an awkward repeated idea ('when I was a child' used twice). According to the provided list, this is a sentence structure error (ID 26). Remove the duplicate word and avoid repeating the same time phrase to make the sentence concise. Also replace the second 'a bike' with the pronoun 'it' to prevent redundancy. Grammar problem type ID: 26

× I think cycling is less popular in Indonesia due to very hot climate and humid, so it makes uncomfortable to cycle.

✓ I think cycling is less popular in Indonesia because the climate is very hot and humid, so it is uncomfortable to cycle.

This sentence contains multiple issues covered by the provided list: incorrect use of adjectives/adverbs and articles/prepositions (IDs 13 and 11). Specifically, 'due to very hot climate and humid' is incorrect: 'climate' needs the definite article 'the' and 'humid' should be the adjective 'humid' describing the climate, so say 'the climate is very hot and humid' or 'very hot and humid climate' with 'the'. Also 'it makes uncomfortable to cycle' is ungrammatical — use 'it is uncomfortable to cycle' or 'makes cycling uncomfortable'. The corrected version fixes article usage, adjective placement, and sentence structure to convey the intended meaning.