Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarifiez le temps verbal et éliminez les hésitations. Donnez une phrase d'ouverture claire au passé, puis une ou deux phrases de soutien concises. Utilisez des connecteurs simples si nécessaire (par exemple "so", "and"). Par exemple, commencez par "Yes, I did" suivi d'une description brève et spécifique.

例: Yes, I did. I rode my bike to school throughout primary and secondary school, and it was my main way to get around because my house was close to the school.

提案: Structurez la réponse avec une opinion claire puis des raisons concises et spécifiques. Évitez les répétitions et les hésitations. Par exemple, dites d'abord "Not as much as before" puis expliquez deux raisons précises (augmentation de la population, trafic et motos/cars). Utilisez des mots de liaison comme "because" ou "so" pour la cohérence.

例: Not as much as before. In Ho Chi Minh City, many people now prefer motorbikes and cars because the population and traffic have increased, so cycling has become less convenient and sometimes unsafe.

× I did, uh, actually, I ride a bike to school, uh, through primary school and secondary school.

✓ I did. Actually, I rode a bike to school throughout primary and secondary school.

The student is describing a past habitual action (when they were a child). English requires past tense for past habitual actions. 'Ride' is present tense and should be changed to the past simple 'rode'. Also replace 'through' with 'throughout' for natural collocation. Suggestion: use past simple for past habits (e.g., 'I rode a bike to school').

× Uh, it used to be, but now, uh, because I live in the, uh, in Ho Chi Minh City, which is the crowded city in Vietnam.

✓ It used to be, but now, because I live in Ho Chi Minh City, which is the most crowded city in Vietnam, bikes are less common.

The original sentence mixes past ('used to be') with present context but leaves the clause incomplete and uses 'the crowded city' incorrectly. Use 'most crowded' as a superlative to compare all cities in Vietnam. Also complete the idea about bikes being less common. Suggestion: keep tense consistent and complete the clause that explains the change.

× Uh, it was in the past, people rode bike, uh, to everywhere, but now seeing the population is increased a lot and umm, we need to, uh.

✓ In the past, people rode bikes everywhere, but now, as the population has increased a lot, we need to use other forms of transport.

This sentence needs clearer tense sequence and correct plural form. Use 'In the past' instead of 'It was in the past', 'bikes' (plural) not 'bike', and present perfect 'has increased' to link past to present. Also complete the sentence by stating what is needed now. Suggestion: use 'bikes' for general plural, use present perfect for changes over time, and finish the clause with a clear outcome.