Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, use correct tense and sentence structure, and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence (e.g., “No, I didn’t.”), then give one short reason with correct past-tense verbs and a linking word (because/so). Avoid repetition and fragmented sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child because my family was low-income at the time. As a result, we could not afford one, so I usually walked to school or used public transport.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence, correct grammar (subject-verb agreement), and one specific supporting detail or example using a linking word (for example/for instance). Keep it to two or three sentences maximum.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. For example, many people ride bicycles to college, school or work because they are cheap and convenient in busy urban areas.

× No, when I was child I don't have any bike because at this time my family situation was not very good.

✓ No, when I was a child I didn't have a bike because at that time my family's situation was not very good.

Multiple issues: missing article before 'child' (should be 'a child') is an article error (ID 22); tense and verb form mismatch: speaker refers to past so 'don't have' should be past 'didn't have' (past tense issue ID 5); 'any bike' is unnatural — use 'a bike' for singular countable noun (singular/plural/quantifier issue ID 1/14); 'at this time' refers to past so use 'at that time' (incorrect use of demonstrative/time reference; treated as sentence structure/time expression). Suggestion: use 'when I was a child' for the time phrase, match past tense for verbs ('didn't have'), and use the correct article 'a bike' and possessive 'my family's situation'.

× This time I belong to a low income family so.

✓ At that time my family belonged to a low-income income bracket, so we could not afford a bike.

Errors: incorrect tense and verb 'belong' used for past situation — should be past 'belonged' (past tense issue ID 5); 'low income family' needs hyphenation 'low-income' and 'belong to a family' is unnatural here (word choice/structure); sentence fragment ending with 'so.' lacks completion (sentence structure error ID 26). Suggestion: state time as 'At that time', use past tense 'belonged' or better phrasing 'my family was low-income' and complete the result, e.g., 'so we could not afford a bike.'

× Bought a bike, was not afforded for us.

✓ Buying a bike was not affordable for us.

Problems: sentence fragments and incorrect word order. 'Bought a bike' is a past-tense verb phrase without subject—sentence without a verb/subject (ID 23/26). 'Was not afforded for us' misuses 'afford' (should be 'was not affordable' or 'we could not afford'). Also passive construction here is incorrect (passive issue ID 21). Suggestion: use 'Buying a bike was not affordable for us' or 'We could not afford to buy a bike.'

× Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country.

This sentence is grammatical and needs no change. It correctly uses plural subject 'bikes' with plural verb 'are'. Keep as is.

× People moves with bikes in their workplace like such as college, schools or office.

✓ People travel to places like colleges, schools, or offices by bike for work or study.

Errors: subject-verb agreement: 'People moves' should be 'People move' (subject-verb agreement ID 27 / third person plural). Preposition and verb choice: 'moves with bikes in their workplace' is unnatural (incorrect use of prepositions ID 11 and sentence structure ID 26). 'like such as' is redundant — use 'such as' or 'like' (conjunction/phrase redundancy ID 16). Also nouns should be plural and parallel: 'colleges, schools, or offices.' Suggestion: use 'People travel to places like colleges, schools, or offices by bike' or 'People commute to work or school by bike.'