Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be clear, accurate and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct unclear phrases, avoid filler sounds (uh), and limit to 3–4 short sentences. Include specific details (age, how you used the bike) and use linking words (for example, so, and) to make the answer coherent.

例: Yes, I did. I had a red bicycle when I was seven, given to me by my parents. I rode it to school and around the neighbourhood every day, so it became my main way of getting around. I also used it to visit friends and play in the park.

提案: Make a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and examples. Remove hesitations and simplify language. Use linking words (for example, because, for instance, therefore) and provide two or three concrete uses or statistics if possible.

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient. For instance, many people use bicycles to go to the market or to visit nearby clinics. Therefore, bikes are a common choice for short trips in both towns and villages.

× I had a red bicycle basket that my parents poked me when I was 7.

✓ I had a red bicycle that my parents bought me when I was 7.

The student used 'poked' incorrectly; the intended verb is 'bought' (past tense of buy). This is a vocabulary error but also incorrect verb choice in past tense. Use 'bought' to indicate purchase in the past. Suggestion: use correct past-tense verb matching meaning (buy → bought).

× Uh, I used to read it to go to school and around the neighborhood every day.

✓ I used to ride it to go to school and around the neighborhood every day.

The student wrote 'read' but meant 'ride'. This is a wrong verb choice; 'used to' is correctly followed by the base verb 'ride' (no -ing). Ensure the verb reflects the intended action (ride a bicycle).

× Uh, and then I use it to play with my friends.

✓ And then I used it to play with my friends.

The speaker is describing past habits, so the past tense 'used' should be used instead of present 'use'. Maintain consistent past tense when recounting past events. Suggestion: use 'used' with habitual past actions.

× Yes, I do because uh, uh, there are a lot of people, uh, use a big very popular in my country, like uh, they use to travel to the market, visit the hospital or come to home because they are cheap and convenient and they used to.

✓ Yes, I do because many people use bikes in my country; they are very popular. For example, people use them to travel to the market, visit the hospital, or go home because they are cheap and convenient.

This sentence has multiple structural and grammar issues: incorrect word order ('use a big very popular'), filler words, incorrect 'use to' for 'used to' or 'use' depending on meaning, and 'come to home' instead of 'go home'. The correction clarifies meaning and uses present simple 'use' for general facts ('many people use bikes'), proper adjective order ('very popular'), and correct verbs ('use them to travel', 'go home'). Suggestion: remove fillers, separate ideas into clear clauses, and use correct verb forms for general facts (present simple) and purposes.