Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Keep answers concise and complete the thought. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repetition and incomplete sentences. Also correct minor grammatical issues (e.g., drop redundant 'did' in short answers) and finish your final statement with a reason or result.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My grandmother gave one to my cousin and me because we were the only two grandchildren, and we spent every afternoon riding around the neighborhood, which created many happy memories.

提案: Make your point with a clear topic sentence, then support it with specific reasons using linking words. Focus on grammatical accuracy and clarity: use complete sentences, correct word order, and avoid awkward phrasing. For example, say where bikes are popular, why, and contrast with cities using connectors like 'because' and 'however.'

例: Bikes are more popular in smaller towns than in big cities because towns have wider streets and less traffic, making cycling safer and more convenient. However, in large cities public transport is more common and the roads are often too crowded for comfortable cycling.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Use simple past for a past state. 'Did have' is grammatically possible but unnecessary here; 'I had' is the natural simple past form. Grammar problem type ID:5

× It was given to me by my grandmother and actually it was given to me and to my cousin since we were the only two grandchildren at the time.

✓ It was given to me by my grandmother, and actually it was given to both my cousin and me since we were the only two grandchildren at the time.

Use simple past passive 'was given' consistently and correct object pronoun order: 'both my cousin and me' not 'to my cousin and to me'. Also combine clauses with a comma and conjunction for clarity. Grammar problem type ID:5

× And I have very fond memories of the bike because.

✓ I have very fond memories of the bike.

The original sentence ends with 'because' leaving the reason incomplete. Remove the dangling conjunction or complete the clause. Here the simple sentence 'I have very fond memories of the bike.' is complete and appropriate. Grammar problem type ID:26

× They are popular in smaller towns than they are in the big cities because they have more space to ride a bike in towns that they haven't.

✓ They are more popular in smaller towns than in big cities because there is more space to ride a bike in towns.

Compare using 'more popular in X than in Y'. Avoid the unclear clause 'towns that they haven't'. Use 'there is' to refer to space availability. Correct preposition pattern and remove unclear phrasing. Grammar problem type ID:11

× Big cities we are not be.

✓ Big cities are not built for bicycles.

Original mixes subjects and verbs incorrectly. Use passive 'are not built' with correct adjective/noun to express suitability. Ensure subject-verb agreement: 'cities are'. Grammar problem type ID:27

× Our big cities are not built to have bikes circling.

✓ Our big cities are not built for bicycles to ride comfortably.

'Built to have bikes circling' is awkward; use 'built for bicycles' or 'for cycling' and add 'comfortably' or 'safely' to clarify. Keep present simple to state a general fact. Grammar problem type ID:26