Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Answer directly, using a clear topic sentence and one or two brief supporting details. Avoid repeating the examiner's question. Keep it natural and concise (max 5 sentences). Use linking words if adding details (e.g., “so,” “but,” “because”).

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bike when I was about seven, and I used it to ride to my friend’s house every afternoon. Because our street was quiet, I felt safe practicing there, so I got more confident riding on busier roads later.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion, then give specific reasons with linking words. Avoid repetition and vague phrases like “there's no emergency.” Mention concrete issues (traffic, lack of bike lanes, crime) and, if possible, a short comparison or consequence. Keep it within 3–4 sentences.

例: No, I don’t think bikes are very popular in my country because urban roads are crowded and there are few dedicated bike lanes. As a result, many people feel unsafe cycling in traffic, and they prefer cars or public transport. If the government built more protected bike lanes, cycling might become more common.

× Did you have a bike where you were a child?

✓ Did you have a bike when you were a child?

The student used the preposition 'where' incorrectly. The correct temporal conjunction for asking about childhood is 'when', not 'where' which refers to location. Replace 'where' with 'when' to match the time reference. Suggestion: use 'when you were a child' for time and 'where' only for places.

× No, I don't. I do not think so because the environment is not safe to have for people to to make use of bike in the community is not safe enough in terms of safety. There's no emergency.

✓ No, I don't. I do not think so because the environment in the community is not safe enough for people to ride bikes. There are no adequate emergency services.

The original response has multiple structural and word-order problems: redundant phrases ('to have for people to to make use of bike'), incorrect preposition order, and unclear noun phrases. Also 'There's no emergency' is unclear; likely intended meaning is lack of emergency services or inadequate emergency response, so use plural 'There are no adequate emergency services.' Suggestions: simplify the sentence, place modifiers next to the noun they describe ('environment in the community'), use 'for people to ride bikes' for purpose/ability, and use a clear noun phrase for emergency services.