Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a simple topic sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific supporting details (where, when, or a short memory). Keep it natural, avoid repetition, and use linking words if you add details. Also correct grammar (e.g., use past tense consistently) and limit the response to no more than five concise sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a small red bicycle when I was about eight years old, which I often rode around my neighborhood with friends. Because we lived near a park, I spent many weekends practising turns and riding on the paths, so I became quite confident on it.

提案: Answer directly and then give clear reasons with linking words. Use correct grammar and more precise vocabulary (e.g., 'rural areas' and 'urban residents'). Provide one or two specific examples or comparisons to support your opinion, and keep it concise and coherent.

例: Not very popular overall. In many urban areas people prefer cars or motorbikes because public transport and traffic make bicycles less practical; however, in rural areas bicycles are still common for short trips and school commutes.

× Of course I like other children. Then I of course had a bike.

✓ Of course I liked it like other children. I had a bike.

There are multiple issues: 1) Tense consistency and meaning: the question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so use past tense 'liked' instead of present 'like'. 2) Pronoun/reference: 'other children' by itself is unclear; the intended meaning is 'like other children' (a phrase), and the speaker likely refers to themselves liking bikes like other children, so reorder to 'I liked it like other children' or better 'Like other children, I liked bikes.' 3) Word order: 'Then I of course had a bike' is awkward; place 'of course' earlier or use a natural past statement: 'I had a bike.' Suggestion: 'Like other children, I liked bikes. I had a bike.' This preserves past tense and clear reference.

× I don't think so, just so we in the rural areas because most of the big city people use cars or motorbikes.

✓ I don't think so, except perhaps in rural areas, because most people in big cities use cars or motorbikes.

Errors and fixes: 1) 'just so we in the rural areas' is ungrammatical: missing verb and incorrect pronoun 'we'. Replace with 'except perhaps in rural areas' to convey the intended contrast. 2) Word order: 'most of the big city people' is awkward; use 'most people in big cities' for natural English. 3) Tense/meaning: present simple 'use' is correct here to describe general habits, so keep it. Suggestion: 'I don't think so, except perhaps in rural areas, because most people in big cities use cars or motorbikes.' This corrects sentence structure, pronoun misuse, and improves clarity.