Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more confident and fluent: answer directly with a clear topic sentence, correct grammar for age expression and memory, reduce fillers (uh) and keep it within 2–4 sentences. Add one specific supporting detail using a linking word. For example, say your age correctly (‘around 12’), describe how often you rode it or a memory, and clarify whether you still remember riding.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was around 12. I rode it almost every day to visit my friends, and I remember learning to balance on the pavement until I felt confident.

提案: Give a clear opinion and support it with specific reasons and correct vocabulary. Avoid hesitations and pronunciation mistakes (bike, not bite). Use a linking word like ‘because’ or ‘for example’, and provide one or two concise reasons (e.g. cost, convenience, traffic). Keep it to 2–3 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are inexpensive and convenient for short journeys. For example, many students cycle to school to avoid traffic and save money on transport.

× Yes. I had a bike uh, when I was around, maybe UH-12 and uh, I didn't remember how I can uh, drive that bike.

✓ Yes. I had a bike when I was around twelve, but I don't remember how I could ride that bike.

The sentence mixes past and present incorrectly. 'I had' is past, so the memory statement should be in past or present perfect. 'I didn't remember' is simple past but followed by 'how I can drive' uses present modal 'can' which is inconsistent. Use 'don't remember' if you currently cannot recall, or 'didn't remember' with 'could' for past ability. Also 'drive' is not correct for a bike; use 'ride'. Spell out numbers in conversation: 'twelve'. Suggestions: keep tense consistent (either past for both clauses or present for the memory), use 'could' for past ability, and use 'ride' for bicycles.

× Yeah, kind of uh, because some of the teenagers nowadays to still need bite to go to school.

✓ Yeah, kind of, because some teenagers nowadays still need bikes to go to school.

The original has several problems: the phrase 'to still need' is incorrect word order and 'bite' is a misspelling of 'bike'. 'Some of the teenagers' is wordy; 'some teenagers' is more natural. Use present tense 'need' for current situations. Suggestions: remove extra 'to', correct spelling to 'bike', and place 'still' before the verb or after subject: 'still need'.

× So yeah, I think by is quite popular in my country.

✓ So yeah, I think bikes are quite popular in my country.

The sentence uses 'by' which is a typo and singular/plural mismatch: 'bike' should be plural 'bikes' when speaking generally, and requires the plural verb 'are'. Use 'bikes are' to indicate general popularity. Suggestion: correct typo to 'bikes' and use plural agreement 'are quite popular'.