Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, tense consistency and add a brief supporting detail. Start with a clear topic sentence in past tense, then give one specific reason using a linking word. Keep it concise (no more than 3–4 sentences).

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. My parents worried about road safety, so they preferred I walk or use public transport. As a result, I didn’t learn to ride until I was a teenager.

提案: Work on article and number agreement and make the statement more natural and specific. Begin with a clear opinion, then give one or two specific reasons linked with connectors (e.g., because, therefore). Use precise vocabulary (e.g., traffic congestion, safety concerns).

例: I don’t think bicycles are very popular in my country because cities have heavy traffic and few protected bike lanes. Therefore, many parents consider cycling unsafe for children, so driving or public transport are more common.

× I don't have a bike when I was a child because my parents don't want us to get accident.

✓ I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn't want us to get into an accident.

The sentence mixes present tense ('don't have', 'don't want') with a past time reference ('when I was a child'). Use past simple for actions in the past: 'didn't have' and 'didn't want'. Additionally, the phrase 'get accident' is ungrammatical; the correct expression is 'get into an accident' or simply 'have an accident'. Use articles: 'an accident'. Suggestion: Use consistent past tense for past events and correct verb phrases: 'I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my parents didn't want us to get into an accident.'

× I don't think that bike is popular in our country because most of the time there's a lot of cars around the road and I think the parents felt that it's not safe to ride a bike for their children.

✓ I don't think that bikes are popular in our country because most of the time there are a lot of cars on the roads, and I think parents feel that it's not safe for their children to ride bikes.

Multiple issues: 'that bike is popular' should be plural general statement 'bikes are popular' (singular/plural and subject-verb agreement). 'There's a lot of cars' mixes singular 'there's' with plural noun; use 'there are a lot of cars'. 'Around the road' is incorrect preposition and noun form; use 'on the roads' or 'around the roads'. 'The parents felt' mixes past 'felt' with present viewpoint 'I don't think... and I think'; keep present 'feel'. 'It's not safe to ride a bike for their children' has incorrect word order and preposition; use 'it's not safe for their children to ride bikes'. Suggestions: Keep tense consistent (present here), match plural forms, use 'there are', use correct prepositions ('on the roads'), and place 'for their children' before the infinitive phrase.