Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be careful with tense and phrasing: this question asks about the past. Start with a clear past-tense topic sentence (e.g. 'No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child'). Then give a brief reason or feeling in past or present perfect if still relevant. Keep it concise (max 4–5 sentences) and avoid repeated words.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. I wanted one for riding to my friends' houses, but my family couldn't afford it at the time. Even now I sometimes wish I'd learned to ride earlier because it seems like a fun way to get around.

提案: Aim for a clearer subject-verb agreement and remove redundancy. Start with a direct sentence answering the question, then add one or two specific reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'for example'). Avoid repeating words ('would would') and unnecessary phrases ('for them to').

例: Yes, I think bikes are very popular in my country because many children use them to play and visit friends. For example, you can often see kids riding around the neighborhood after school, and some families also use bicycles for short trips to the market.

× No, I don't have it, but I'm dreaming of having one.

✓ No, I didn't have one, but I was dreaming of having one.

The question asks about the past ('when you were a child'), so the student should use past tense. 'I don't have it' is present tense and refers to possession now; use 'I didn't have one' for the past. Also 'it' is awkward; 'one' refers to 'a bike' and is more natural. 'I'm dreaming' (present continuous) should be changed to 'I was dreaming' to match past-time reference. Suggestion: Match time frames by using past tense throughout when talking about childhood events.

× From my perspective, it is indeed popular in my country since it is something that children would would use for them to play with their friends and ride around the neighborhood.

✓ From my perspective, bikes are indeed popular in my country since they are something that children would use to play with their friends and ride around the neighborhood.

Multiple issues: 'it is indeed popular' uses singular 'it' but the subject 'bikes' is plural, so use 'bikes are indeed popular' (subject-verb agreement). Repeating 'would' is an error and must be reduced to one 'would'. The phrase 'use for them to play' is ungrammatical; use 'use to play' or 'use for playing'. Also replace 'it' with 'they' to match the plural noun 'bikes'. Suggestion: Ensure pronouns match the number of their antecedents, remove duplicate words, and use correct infinitive or gerund structures (use to play or for playing).