Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be concise, correct grammar and organize into a clear topic sentence plus one or two supporting details. Avoid repetition ("used to" repeated, "have own a" is wrong). Use linking words for coherence (e.g., "then"). Aim for 2–3 sentences: a direct answer followed by a brief supporting detail with a reason or result.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bike when I was a child, but it broke down once; my dad repaired it and later he gave it to the neighbour children, so I stopped riding it.

提案: Answer directly and use clearer phrasing and grammar. State your opinion first, then give one specific reason or example using linking words (e.g., "however", "because", "nowadays"). Avoid repetition and awkward phrasing like "today's today's" and "more on motorcycles."

例: I think bikes were more popular in the past, but nowadays motorcycles are more common because they are faster and more convenient for longer commutes.

× I used to have one. I used to have own a bike but apparently it broke down and my dad repaired it and then gave it to the neighbor kids.

✓ I used to have one. I used to own a bike, but it broke down, my dad repaired it, and then he gave it to the neighbor kids.

Problems: incorrect verb collocation and word order ('have own a bike' is ungrammatical), redundant repetition of 'used to', missing pronoun before 'gave' and awkward clause connections. Correction: replace 'have own a bike' with 'own a bike' (correct verb-object order), remove the unnecessary repeated 'I used to' for conciseness, add 'he' before 'gave' to clarify the subject, and add commas to separate clauses. Suggestion: use 'used to' once to indicate past habit, use 'own' directly as the main verb, and keep clear subject references (e.g., 'my dad repaired it and then he gave it...').

× Well, apparently it used to be popular. However today's today's trending in a country, it has been lowered and today is more on motorcycles.

✓ Well, apparently it used to be popular. However, nowadays in my country its popularity has decreased, and people prefer motorcycles more.

Problems: repetition ('today's today's'), incorrect phrase 'trending in a country', incorrect tense/structure 'it has been lowered', and awkward 'today is more on motorcycles'. Correction: use 'nowadays' to refer to the present time, 'in my country' for specificity, 'its popularity has decreased' for correct passive/active meaning, and 'people prefer motorcycles more' for natural expression. Suggestion: avoid repeating words, use idiomatic time expressions (nowadays), choose verbs that naturally collocate with 'popularity' (decrease/rise), and express preferences with 'people prefer' or 'more people ride'.