Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be natural, accurate and concise. Start with a direct topic sentence (e.g., “Yes, I did.”), correct pronoun use (use “it” or “one” for a bike), and add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid informal or unclear phrasing like “her” for a bike and unnecessary words. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I did. I had a bright red bicycle when I was about eight, and I rode it every afternoon to visit my friends. Because there were few cars in my neighborhood, cycling felt safe and fun, and it helped me learn independence.

提案: Give a clear topic sentence and support it with specific reasons and a linking word. Correct grammar (use present/past consistently and include articles). Be specific about when and why popularity changed and try to use a wider range of vocabulary (e.g., “public transport,” “commuting,” “declined”). Limit to 3–4 sentences.

例: Bicycles used to be more popular a few decades ago, but their use has declined recently. This is mainly because cities have expanded and people now prefer public transport like buses and subways for commuting. Additionally, faster lifestyles and longer distances make cycling less practical for many commuters.

× Of course I had her back when I was a young boy.

✓ Of course I had one back when I was a young boy.

The student used the pronoun 'her' to refer to 'a bike', which is incorrect in standard English. Replace 'her' with the neutral pronoun 'one' to refer to 'a bike' previously mentioned, or repeat the noun 'a bike'. Suggestion: use 'one' or 'a bike' to avoid incorrect gendered pronoun references.

× I think it was popular several years ago, but now people would like take a bus and subway rather than by bike.

✓ I think bikes were popular several years ago, but now people prefer to take buses and the subway rather than ride bikes.

There are multiple tense and verb-choice problems. 'I think it was popular' mixes present judgement 'I think' with an incorrect singular subject; use 'bikes were' to match plural 'bikes' and past reference. 'Would like take' is missing 'to' after 'like' and 'would like' is an unnecessary conditional; use 'prefer to take' for a general present preference. Use plural 'buses' and include the article 'the' before 'subway' if referring to the city's subway system. Replace 'by bike' with 'ride bikes' for natural English. Suggestion: keep consistent tense, use correct infinitive form 'to take', and match plurality and articles appropriately.