Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Ответ должен быть более плавным и содержательным: сначала дать короткий прямой ответ, затем добавить 1–2 конкретные детали (например, когда вы получили велосипед, почему трудно было ездить, как вы учились). Избегайте тавтологии («ride a bike» повторяется). Используйте связки для логичности, например: “although”, “because”, “so”.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was about seven. However, I couldn't ride it well at first because it was too big for me, so I often fell and needed help from my father to balance.

提案: Ответ должен быть более организованным и конкретным: начните с прямого мнения, затем приведите 2–3 конкретных причин или примеров (например: велодорожки, велопрокат, модные группы). Избегайте грамматических ошибок и незавершённых фраз. Используйте связки: “because”, “for example”, “also”.

例: Yes, bikes have become very popular in my country because more people are focusing on fitness and eco-friendly travel. For example, many cities have built bike lanes and there are bike-sharing schemes, so people can cycle to work or for exercise.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I couldn't ride a bike very well and it was hard to ride it.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I couldn't ride it very well and it was hard to ride.

The sentence uses past tense correctly overall, but it is wordy and contains redundancy: 'ride a bike' and 'ride it' refer to the same thing. Simplify by using a single reference ('it') after mentioning 'a bike'. This improves cohesion and avoids repetitive phrasing. Suggestion: After introducing 'a bike', use pronouns for subsequent mentions and avoid repeating the noun.

× Nowadays bikes are really popular in my country, especially with its popular with people who are trying to keep fit and they want to be sporty.

✓ Nowadays bikes are really popular in my country, especially with people who are trying to keep fit and who want to be sporty.

The original sentence repeats 'popular' and contains an incorrect phrase 'with its popular with'. This is a conjunction/phrase structure issue causing redundancy and grammatical error. Remove the repeated phrase and connect clauses correctly using 'with' followed by the noun phrase or use 'especially' plus a clause. Use parallel structure: 'people who are trying to keep fit and who want to be sporty.' Suggestion: Avoid repeating words and ensure clauses connected by 'and' have parallel structure.

× They really like cycling every day and in my city there are lots of special.

✓ They really like cycling every day, and in my city there are lots of special lanes for cyclists.

The original sentence is incomplete: 'there are lots of special' lacks a noun to complete the idea. This is a sentence structure error; the clause must include the object that 'special' modifies. Provide the missing noun (e.g., 'lanes for cyclists') to complete the meaning and add a comma before the coordinating conjunction for clarity. Suggestion: Ensure adjectives are followed by the nouns they modify and complete each clause with necessary elements.