Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, but it is a bit wordy and slightly repetitive. To improve, start with a concise topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid repeating the same idea (e.g., “freedom” and “independence” together) and keep the response to no more than four sentences. Also vary vocabulary slightly (e.g., ‘teach’ instead of ‘train’).

例: Yes — I had a bike when I was a child. I learned to ride it on my own because my parents were busy, so I practiced in our yard every afternoon. That independence made me feel confident and gave me a lot of freedom to explore around the neighborhood.

提案: The answer addresses the question but is unclear and contains awkward phrasing and assumptions. Improve by directly stating whether bikes are popular now (or were), give a specific reason or example, and use clear linking words. Keep sentences concise and avoid vague phrases like 'not really free into.'

例: I don't think bikes were very popular in the country where I grew up because most people preferred cars for daily travel. For example, there were few bike lanes and public transport was designed around cars, so cycling felt impractical for commuting.

× Yes, I did have a bike when I was a child.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

Using 'did have' is unnecessary for a simple past statement; the simple past 'had' is correct and more natural. Use auxiliary 'did' for emphasis or in negative/questions, otherwise use past simple. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5

× I practiced alone.

✓ I practiced by myself.

'Alone' is grammatically correct but 'by myself' is more natural in this context; both are acceptable. This is a stylistic suggestion rather than a strict error. Keep consistent pronoun usage. Grammar Problem Type ID: 26

× My father or parents didn't actually train or help me while riding the bike.

✓ My parents didn't actually teach or help me while I was learning to ride the bike.

The original mixes 'father or parents', which is unclear. Also 'train' is odd for learning to ride a bike; 'teach' is better. Use 'while I was learning to ride the bike' to show the time frame. Corrects pronoun/subject clarity and tense structure. Grammar Problem Type ID: 12

× I loved it because it helped me have the freedom and the time and as well as the independence to do my own thing about it.

✓ I loved it because it gave me the freedom, time, and independence to do my own thing.

The phrase uses redundant conjunctions ('and' and 'as well as') and awkward phrasing ('do my own thing about it'). Combine items in a parallel list: 'freedom, time, and independence', and use 'gave me' for natural expression. Grammar Problem Type ID: 16

× I wouldn't say it was popular back then because I grew up in a different country, so I assumed that people there weren't really free into riding bikes because it was more on cars for their daily transportation.

✓ I wouldn't say it was popular back then because I grew up in a different country, so I assumed that people there weren't really into riding bikes because they used cars more for daily transportation.

'Free into' is incorrect collocation; use 'into'. 'It was more on cars' is ungrammatical—use 'they used cars more' to match the plural subject 'people'. Also maintain tense consistency. Fixes subject-verb agreement and preposition usage. Grammar Problem Type ID: 27

× But I did want to learn because I was a kid and so I would practice around the house.

✓ But I wanted to learn because I was a kid, so I would practice around the house.

Use simple past 'wanted' instead of 'did want' unless emphasizing. 'So' is sufficient connector; remove redundant 'and'. 'Would practice' is acceptable to indicate habitual past action. Keeps tense consistent. Grammar Problem Type ID: 5