Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar and fluency: use correct verb forms (gave, used), reduce filler words (uh), and make sentences concise and natural. Organize as a clear topic sentence followed by one or two supporting details and a brief feeling. Add linking words for coherence (for example, 'and', 'so', 'which').

例: Yes. My father gave me a bicycle for my tenth birthday, and I used to ride it with my friends every afternoon. It was a very happy time because we explored the neighborhood and felt independent.

提案: Make your opinion clearer and more concise. Start with a direct answer, then give two specific reasons using linking words (for example, 'because', 'nowadays', 'however'). Correct awkward phrases (e.g., 'in the past', 'prefer to use'). Avoid hesitations and repetition.

例: Not really. Bikes were more common in the past, but nowadays people prefer public transport or private cars because cities are larger and cycling can be unsafe. However, cycling is still popular in some areas for exercise or short trips.

× Well, yes, when I was a child, my father give me a bike for my birthday present.

✓ Well, yes, when I was a child, my father gave me a bike for my birthday present.

The verb 'give' should be in the past tense to match 'when I was a child' and the action that happened in the past. Use 'gave' (simple past) for a completed past action. Suggestion: use simple past for past events (subject + past form of verb).

× I really appreciate and I do really use it to uh, riding the bike with my partners.

✓ I really appreciated it and I really used it to ride the bike with my friends.

Several issues: 'appreciate' should be past tense ('appreciated') to match the past context; 'do really use' is awkward and unnecessary—use simple past 'used'; after 'use' the base verb 'ride' is required, not the '-ing' form 'riding'; 'partners' is better as 'friends' in this context. Suggestion: keep consistent past tense and use 'use' + base verb when indicating purpose (used it to ride).

× That's a very happiness time for me.

✓ That was a very happy time for me.

'Happiness' is a noun, but an adjective is needed to modify 'time'. Use 'happy' (adjective). Also change 'That's' to 'That was' to keep past tense consistent. Suggestion: use adjective forms to describe nouns and match tense across the sentence.

× Well, not yet.

✓ Well, not really.

The phrase 'Not yet' implies something expected to happen later; in context the student means 'not now' or 'not really' regarding popularity. 'Not really' fits conversational response about current popularity. Suggestion: choose an adverbial phrase that matches intended meaning.

× perhaps it's so very popular in the past time,

✓ perhaps it was very popular in the past,

Use past tense 'was' for past popularity; 'in the past time' is unidiomatic—use 'in the past' or 'previously'. Also remove unnecessary intensifier 'so'. Suggestion: use 'in the past' to talk about previous periods and match verb tense.

× but now I think people prefer like to using the umm, public transportation or use the private cars to going out to go out, though I think maybe not.

✓ but now I think people prefer to use public transportation or private cars to go out, although I'm not sure.

Multiple errors: 'prefer like to using' is incorrect—use 'prefer to use' or 'like using'; after 'prefer' the pattern 'prefer to + base verb' is common. 'the public transportation' is uncountable—use 'public transportation' without 'the'. 'use the private cars' should be 'private cars' (no 'the'). 'to going out' should be 'to go out' (base verb after 'to'). The trailing 'though I think maybe not' is vague; 'although I'm not sure' is clearer. Suggestion: simplify structure: 'prefer to use X or Y to go out' and remove unnecessary words.