Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Focus on clear, grammatical sentences that directly answer the question with a topic sentence, then add one or two specific supporting details. Avoid long, confused phrases and incorrect verb forms. Use linking words (for example, and, so, because) to make your meaning clear. Keep answers to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was light blue and my parents gave it to me for my birthday. I used it almost every day to visit friends and go to the local shop, so I learned to ride confidently.

提案: Begin with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with specific reasons and one example. Correct grammar for opinions (e.g., "I think bikes are quite popular"). Use linking words (for example, because, for instance) and finish your thought — avoid trailing off. Limit to 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, my university has a dedicated bicycle lane for students. As a result, many students cycle to campus every day.

× Yes, I had a bite when it were to shine.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child.

The original mixes wrong words and tenses: 'bite' is incorrect word choice (should be 'bike'), and 'it were to shine' is ungrammatical. The question asked about having a bike when the student was a child, so use simple past 'I had' and a clause 'when I was a child.' Suggestion: use correct vocabulary and simple past for past time references.

× It's water blue.

✓ It was bright blue.

The sentence uses 'water blue', which is not a natural adjective phrase. Also the event is in the past, so use past 'was' not 'is.' Use a standard adjective phrase like 'bright blue' or 'sky-blue.' Suggestion: match adjective choice to meaning and use past tense consistency.

× It didn't die.

✓ It didn't die.

This sentence is grammatically correct in form (negative past), but semantically odd for a bike. If intended to mean the bike didn't stop working, a clearer phrasing is 'It didn't break' or 'It didn't stop working.' Suggestion: choose verbs appropriate for objects (e.g. 'break' for a bike) and keep past tense.

× White does my friend give me for my birthday and yours is almost every day to go to the shop and like a lot of the neighborhood.

✓ My friend gave it to me for my birthday, and I used it almost every day to go to the shop and around the neighborhood.

The original has wrong word order, incorrect pronoun usage ('White' instead of 'What' or misplaced word), and tense problems. Use past 'gave' to match 'for my birthday' and past habit 'used it almost every day.' Pronoun 'it' refers to the bike. Also fix word order and prepositions: 'go to the shop and around the neighborhood.' Suggestion: structure the sentence as subject + past verb + object, and use clear pronouns.

× Yes, I think it's slowly probably popular in my country people can use it in everyday and for example in my university it's have a a bicycle way for students who have bicycle.

✓ Yes, I think bicycles are becoming gradually more popular in my country because people can use them every day. For example, my university has a bicycle lane for students who have bicycles.

Multiple issues: wrong contractions and tense ('it's slowly probably popular' is awkward), subject-verb agreement ('it's have' should be 'has'), and plural/singular issues ('bicycle' vs 'bicycles', 'a bicycle way' should be 'a bicycle lane'). Use present simple for general truths: 'bicycles are popular' or present continuous 'are becoming more popular.' Use 'every day' as two words. Suggestion: use clear subjects, correct verb forms for agreement, and common collocations like 'bicycle lane.'

× And I think it's popular because.

✓ And I think they're popular because they are convenient and good for short trips.

The original is a sentence fragment ending with 'because' and lacking a reason. Provide a complete clause explaining why: 'because they are convenient...' Also match plural subject 'they' if referring to bicycles. Suggestion: avoid sentence fragments by completing the thought and ensure pronoun agreement with the noun referred to.