Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct, grammatically correct, and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence, use past tense consistently, avoid repetition, and add one brief supporting detail with a linking word. For example, mention why you didn’t have a bike or what you used instead. Keep it to no more than 3–4 short sentences.

例: No, I didn’t have a bike when I was a child. Instead, I usually travelled to school by car because my parents drove me. As a result, I rarely needed to learn how to ride.

提案: Use correct agreement and smoother linking words. Begin with a clear opinion, then add specific supporting details and an example or short comparison. Replace phrases like “it is” with plural agreement for “bikes,” and use connectors such as “because,” “for example,” or “as a result.” Keep answers natural and within 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I think bikes are quite popular in my country, especially among students and young adults. This is because bikes are affordable and environmentally friendly, and they don’t require petrol. For example, many university students cycle to campus to save money and avoid traffic.

× No I didn't. I use a car as a transportation device to to go to school.

✓ No, I didn't. I used a car as a means of transportation to go to school.

The question asks about the past (when you were a child), so the student's verb should be in the past tense. 'use' is present tense; change to 'used'. 'as a transportation device' is awkward and unnatural—use 'as a means of transportation'. Also remove the duplicated 'to'. Add a comma after 'No' for clarity.

× I believe bikes are popular amongst students and young adults because it is affordable and it doesn't need gas.

✓ I believe bikes are popular among students and young adults because they are affordable and don't need gas.

The subject 'bikes' is plural, so collective references must agree: use 'they are' (plural) instead of 'it is'. Also 'among' is more common than 'amongst' in many varieties of English. 'Don't need gas' is correct with the plural subject. Removing the extra 'it' fixes subject-verb agreement and makes the sentence grammatical and natural.