Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains many grammatical errors and irrelevant phrases. Give a direct topic sentence, correct tense and possessive forms, and add one or two specific supporting details (who bought it, what it looked like, a short memory). Use linking words for coherence and keep it within 3–4 concise sentences.

例: Yes, I did. My grandmother bought me a pink bicycle when I was six, and it had a little cartoon character on the frame. I remember practicing in the park near our house until I could ride without help, which made me very proud.

提案: The answer needs clearer structure and accurate vocabulary. Start with a direct opinion, then give specific reasons and examples using linking words (e.g., 'because', 'for example', 'however'). Correct basic grammar (subject-verb agreement, articles) and avoid unclear fragments. Keep it to 2–3 concise sentences.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country, especially for short trips. For example, many people cycle to nearby shops or schools because it is cheap and convenient, and a typical ride to a local store takes only five minutes.

× Of course, when I was young I have a buy for my grandmother bought it for me.

✓ Of course, when I was young I had a bike because my grandmother bought it for me.

The student mixed present perfect 'have' with a past-time reference 'when I was young' and used 'buy' incorrectly instead of 'bike'. Use simple past 'had' to match the past time frame. Also correct the noun 'bike' and word order: 'had a bike because my grandmother bought it for me.' Suggestion: use consistent past tense for past events and check word choice ('bike' not 'buy').

× Dubai is character of cartoon.

✓ Doraemon is a cartoon character.

The sentence has wrong word order and possibly a wrong proper noun. 'Character of cartoon' is ungrammatical; correct form is 'a cartoon character.' Also 'Dubai' (a city) seems incorrect here; likely intended a character name (example changed to 'Doraemon' or use the correct character name). Suggestion: use 'a/an' before singular countable nouns and place 'cartoon' as adjective before 'character'.

× I like that is Kitty Sally and pink color because I love the.

✓ I like Kitty Sally and the color pink because I love it.

The original has incorrect clause structure 'that is' and missing pronoun object for 'love.' Use direct object 'I like Kitty Sally' and 'the color pink' with article 'the.' Finish with pronoun 'it' referring to the color. Suggestion: avoid unnecessary fillers like 'that is' and include articles and pronouns where needed.

× Actually I think by pop quiet popular in my country for a short travel, for example from my home to the local shop allow five minute to buy.

✓ Actually I think bikes are quite popular in my country for short trips; for example, from my home to the local shop it takes about five minutes by bike.

Multiple errors: wrong verb forms and word order. Use present simple 'bikes are' for general truth (present tense issue) and 'quite' instead of 'quiet.' 'Short travel' should be 'short trips.' The clause about duration needs 'it takes about five minutes' and 'by bike' indicates mode. Suggestion: use 'are' for plural subject 'bikes,' correct adverb 'quite,' and standard expressions 'short trips' and 'it takes about X minutes.'

× Moreover, it not an app.

✓ Moreover, it is not expensive.

The fragment 'it not an app' is likely a pronunciation-to-text error; grammatically, 'it not' misses auxiliary 'is' (third person singular issue) and 'app' doesn't fit context. If intended meaning was 'not expensive,' replace with correct adjective and include auxiliary: 'it is not expensive.' Suggestion: ensure auxiliary verbs are present ('is not') and choose correct vocabulary for intended meaning.