Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be direct and clear: start with a concise topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details. Use correct grammar (past tense) and avoid filler words. Connect ideas with simple linking words (for example, “so” or “because”), and correct unclear phrases like “borrowed my sitter.” Aim for 2–4 sentences, natural phrasing, and accurate vocabulary (e.g., “borrowed a bike,” “practice riding”).

例: No, I didn't have my own bike when I was a child because I couldn't ride yet. So I used my cousin's bike to practise riding around our neighborhood until I learned how to balance.

提案: Start with a clear opinion sentence, then support it with two specific reasons using linking words (e.g., “however,” “because,” “for example”). Avoid hesitation sounds and unclear words like “Sup” — use precise vocabulary such as “infrastructure” or “bike lanes.” Keep sentences short and accurate. Mention specific examples (hot climate, lack of bike lanes) to make your answer concrete.

例: I think bicycles are more popular now than in the past for exercise and leisure. However, they are still uncommon for daily commuting because there are few bike lanes and the weather is very hot for cycling in many regions.

× When I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because I couldn't ride a bike.

✓ When I was a child, I didn't have my own bike because I couldn't ride one.

The original sentence is mostly correct tense-wise but repeats 'bike' awkwardly; replacing the second 'bike' with the pronoun 'one' improves clarity and avoids redundancy. Use past tense 'didn't have' and 'couldn't ride' correctly.

× So I borrowed my sitter to practice.

✓ So I borrowed my sister's bike to practice.

The original uses 'sitter' which is likely a wrong word; context implies borrowing someone’s bike. 'Sister's bike' is a correct noun phrase. Also 'borrowed someone to practice' is incorrect because you borrow an object, not a person.

× Uh, practice in a by a normal bike.

✓ I practiced on a regular bike.

The original phrase is ungrammatical: wrong prepositions and word order ('in a by a normal bike'). Correct structure is subject + past verb + preposition + noun: 'I practiced on a regular bike.' Use 'regular' instead of 'normal' for natural phrasing.

× Have two wheels.

✓ It has two wheels.

Fragment 'Have two wheels.' lacks subject and wrong number agreement. 'It has two wheels' is a complete sentence with third-person singular subject 'it' and verb 'has'.

× In my opinion, now uh, there are more popular than the past, uh is for exercise, but in daily life it's not popular because, uh, it's not Sup the road, it's not support and the weather is too hot.

✓ In my opinion, bikes are more popular now than in the past; they are used for exercise, but not for daily transport because the roads are not supportive and the weather is too hot.

Multiple issues: incorrect comparative structure 'there are more popular than the past' should be 'bikes are more popular now than in the past.' Use present simple for general statements. 'Is for exercise' needs a subject and verb agreement: 'they are used for exercise.' 'It's not Sup the road, it's not support' seems to attempt to say roads are not supportive; correct: 'the roads are not supportive' or 'the roads do not support cycling.' Correct plural 'roads' and verb agreement 'are'.

× It's not fit for bike.

✓ They are not suitable for biking.

Original 'fit for bike' is incorrect collocation and missing article. Use 'suitable for biking' or 'fit for cycling.' Also match subject number: 'they' (bikes) or refer to conditions 'the roads are not suitable for biking.'