Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more grammatical, concise and clear. Start with a direct topic sentence, correct article and plural use, and add one brief supporting detail. Use linking if needed. For example, say whether you owned one or more bikes, correct word order (e.g., “I did have a bike” → “I had a bike”), and add a short reason or memory. Keep it to 1–3 sentences.

例: I had several bikes when I was a child, but my favourite was a red one. I loved it because it was fast and I rode it every day to visit my friends.

提案: Make the response more fluent and grammatical: begin with a clear topic sentence, then give specific supporting details using linking words (e.g., because, for example, therefore). Correct nouns and articles (e.g., “there is a lot of traffic” → “there is a lot of traffic congestion”; “broker” unclear—likely “delivery workers” or “couriers”). Keep sentences concise and avoid redundancy.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because there is heavy traffic in the cities, so many people choose cycling as an alternative. For example, delivery couriers and students often commute by bicycle to avoid delays and save money.

× I did have bike or several one but the most I like is the red one.

✓ I did have a bike or several, but the one I liked most was the red one.

The sentence misses the indefinite article 'a' before the singular count noun 'bike' (singular and plural issue). Also 'several one' is incorrect; use 'several' alone for plural or restructure. Tense consistency: question asks about the past, so use past tense 'liked' and past reference 'was'. Suggestions: add 'a' before 'bike', replace 'several one' with 'several' or 'several bikes', and change 'the most I like' to 'the one I liked most' to match past time reference.

× I think bikes are popular in my country because of there is a lot of traffic congestion in the city and people tend to use alternative transport such as bicycle.

✓ I think bikes are popular in my country because there is a lot of traffic congestion in the city and people tend to use alternative transport such as bicycles.

The phrase 'because of there is' mixes 'because of' and 'there is' incorrectly; use 'because there is' (conjunction + clause) or 'because of' + noun. Also 'bicycle' should be plural 'bicycles' when speaking generally. Suggestions: choose 'because there is' to introduce the clause and use plural for general reference to 'bicycles'.

× For example, broker and students commute by bicycle in order to avoid delays.

✓ For example, workers and students commute by bicycle in order to avoid delays.

'Broker' is incorrect in this context and may be a wrong word choice; if the intended meaning is people who work (commuters), use 'workers' or 'office workers'. Also ensure plural nouns match the plural verb 'commute'. If 'broker' was intended as singular, it causes agreement and meaning issues. Suggest using the correct plural noun 'workers' or 'brokers' depending on intent; here 'workers' fits the context better.