Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Stay on topic and directly answer the question. Begin with a clear topic sentence (Yes/No) about whether you had a bike as a child, then add one or two brief supporting details (e.g., who you rode with, how often, a memory). Keep to 1–3 short sentences, avoid irrelevant personal introductions, and use simple linking words like “and” or “because.”

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. I rode it to visit my friends and to the local park almost every day, which helped me learn balance and independence.

提案: Answer directly and organise your ideas. Start with a clear statement about popularity, then give one or two specific reasons or examples (e.g., traffic, cost, environment). Use correct grammar (subject-verb agreement) and linking words like “because” or “for example.” Avoid unclear phrases (e.g., “sailed my bike”) and repetition.

例: Yes, bikes are very popular in my country because they are cheap and convenient for short trips. For example, many people use bicycles to commute to work in crowded cities, and there are also dedicated bike lanes in some areas.

× Hello, my name is uh now I'm work in a foreign bank as a cash officer and leave my country.

✓ Hello, my name is [Name]. I now work in a foreign bank as a cash officer and have left my country.

The original is a run-on sentence with incorrect verb forms. 'Now I'm work' is wrong because after 'I am' a present participle or simple verb should be used; correct is 'I now work' or 'I'm working'. 'Leave my country' uses base form but needs present perfect to indicate a past action with present relevance: 'have left my country'. Split into two sentences for clarity and natural speech. Suggestions: replace 'now I'm work' with 'I now work' or 'I'm working', and use 'have left' to show a past action affecting the present.

× He has bikes are popular in my country.

✓ Bikes are popular in my country.

The phrase begins with an unnecessary pronoun 'He' and 'has' which do not fit the sentence; this makes the sentence ungrammatical. Remove 'He has' to make a correct subject-verb structure: 'Bikes are popular in my country.' Ensure the subject matches the comment about general popularity.

× Also I have a bike but last year I sailed my bike 'cause I faced many troubles.

✓ I also had a bike, but last year I sold my bike because I faced many problems.

Several errors: 'have' should be past 'had' when referring to possession before selling; 'sailed' is incorrect word choice (likely intended 'sold'); ' 'cause' is informal and should be 'because'; 'troubles' is permissible but 'problems' is more natural here. Use past tense consistently for past events: 'I had... I sold... I faced.' Suggestion: use 'sold' for selling, and maintain past tense verbs.

× That's why I save my bike.

✓ That's why I sold my bike.

The sentence mixes present tense 'save' with previous context about last year. The correct past tense is 'sold' to match 'last year' and previous sentence. Also 'That's why I saved my bike' would mean kept it, which conflicts with selling; use 'sold' to reflect the intended meaning.

× Yes, bike are more popular in my country.

✓ Yes, bikes are more popular in my country.

Subject-verb agreement and number error: 'bike' is singular but 'are' is plural. To match 'are' use the plural 'bikes'. Alternatively, say 'A bike is more popular' but context prefers plural. Use plural noun 'bikes' with plural verb 'are'.