Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is clear and relevant, with a good short narrative. To improve, make the response more concise, correct minor grammar issues, use a linking word for coherence, and add one specific detail (for example where or with whom you learned) to enrich the answer. Also avoid repetition like "kept failing over" and use precise verb forms (e.g., "kept failing" or "failed repeatedly").

例: Yes, I had a bike. I started learning when I was six, but at first I failed repeatedly. However, with daily practice and encouragement from my older brother, I gradually improved and now I enjoy cycling around the park.

提案: Your answer addresses the question and gives a reason, but contains grammar mistakes and awkward phrasing that reduce clarity. Improve by using correct sentence structures, adding a linking phrase, and including a specific example or statistic to support your point. Replace vague phrases ("the road it worked as in support cycling") with clearer expressions such as "there is little infrastructure for cyclists."

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country because there is little infrastructure for cyclists — for example, few dedicated bike lanes and heavy traffic. Consequently, most people choose motorbikes or cars for their daily commute.

× I started learning when I was 6 but at first I wasn't successful.

✓ I started learning when I was six, but at first I was not successful.

Use a consistent written form for numbers (write 'six' in full in formal writing) and avoid contractions in formal contexts; grammatically the sentence is fine in past tense, so only style was adjusted.

× I learned mostly by trial and error and kept failing over.

✓ I learned mostly by trial and error and kept failing.

The phrase 'failing over' is unidiomatic. Use the present participle 'failing' after 'kept' to indicate repeated action. Removing 'over' makes the sentence natural and grammatically correct.

× Eventually I improved after practicing a lot and now I enjoy cycling.

✓ Eventually I improved after practicing a lot, and now I enjoy cycling.

The sentence mixes past ('improved', 'practicing') and present ('now I enjoy') correctly; the only issue is punctuation: add a comma before 'and' to join two independent clauses. Tense usage is appropriate.

× I don't think bikes are a very popular in my country because the road it worked as in support cycling there are a few dedicated bike lanes and traffic is often heavy.

✓ I don't think bikes are very popular in my country because the roads are not well suited to cycling; there are few dedicated bike lanes and traffic is often heavy.

Errors fixed: remove the extra article 'a' before 'very popular' (adjective phrase), correct 'the road it worked as in support cycling' which is ungrammatical by replacing with 'the roads are not well suited to cycling' (correct adjective and verb agreement), and change 'a few dedicated bike lanes' to 'few dedicated bike lanes' to match the intended negative meaning. Also pluralized 'road' to 'roads' to match general statement.

× As a result, most people prefer motorbikes or car for their daily commute.

✓ As a result, most people prefer motorbikes or cars for their daily commute.

Parallel nouns in a list should match in number. 'Motorbikes or car' should be 'motorbikes or cars' to maintain plural form and parallelism with 'most people'. Alternatively 'a car' could be used if choosing singular form consistently.