Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Correct grammar (use past tense) and make the response more concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence, then give one or two specific supporting details using linking words. Avoid redundancy and keep within four sentences.

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My mother thought cycling would distract me from my studies, so she preferred I spend more time on schoolwork. As a result, I usually walked or took the bus to school.

提案: Remove filler words, correct plural and article errors, and organize details with linking words. Give specific examples or brief comparisons to add clarity while keeping it natural and concise.

例: Yes, bikes are quite popular in my country. Many children and teenagers use them for short trips, such as going to school or tuition classes, because they are cheap and convenient. In cities, however, motorcycles and buses are more common for longer journeys.

× No, I didn't had a bike when I was a child because my mother thought it was a waste of time to ride a bike.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child because my mother thought it was a waste of time to ride a bike.

Use the base form of the verb after did/didn't. The auxiliary did already indicates past tense, so the main verb should be 'have', not 'had'. Suggestion: after 'didn't' always use the infinitive without 'to' (base form).

× Instead she thinks that I should focus on my studies.

✓ Instead she thought that I should focus on my studies.

The surrounding context is past (Talking about childhood), so the verb should be in past tense for consistency: 'thought' instead of 'thinks'. Maintain consistent tense when reporting past events. Suggestion: match verb tense to the narrative time frame.

× In my country a lot of Childs and teenagers use bikes for their transportation and among school students bike is very popular.

✓ In my country a lot of children and teenagers use bikes for their transportation and among school students bikes are very popular.

'Childs' is incorrect plural of 'child'; the correct plural is 'children'. Also 'bike is very popular' is mismatched because the subject 'school students' is plural, so use plural 'bikes are very popular' or rephrase. Suggestion: use correct irregular plural 'children' and ensure noun number agreement between subject and verb.

× They use bike to go to their tuition or to school.

✓ They use bikes to go to their tuition or to school.

Use plural 'bikes' for general statement and the infinitive 'to go' is correct but include plural. Also 'tuition' can be fine in some varieties, but 'their tuition classes' or 'tuitions' may be clearer. Suggestion: say 'to their tuition classes or to school' and keep noun number consistent.