Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Perbaiki kejelasan dan kelengkapan jawaban. Jawaban Anda mengulang frasa "when I was a child" dan berhenti tiba-tiba tanpa menyelesaikan gagasan. Struktur yang lebih baik: mulai dengan kalimat topik langsung, lalu tambahkan satu atau dua detail spesifik (mis. siapa memberi, tipe sepeda, kegiatan yang biasa dilakukan). Gunakan kata penghubung sederhana bila perlu. Usahakan maksimal 3–4 kalimat, natural dan lengkap.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. My parents bought it for me on my seventh birthday, and it was a small red bicycle with training wheels. I used to ride it around the park near our house every afternoon, which helped me feel independent and active.

提案: Perbaiki tata bahasa, kosakata, dan kejelasan ide. Jawaban Anda mengandung kesalahan tata bahasa (subject-verb agreement, kata yang tidak tepat) dan frasa yang tidak jelas ("Ryzen"). Susun satu kalimat topik yang jelas, lalu jelaskan satu atau dua alasan spesifik mengapa sepeda populer (mis. e-bikes, harga, kesehatan, lalu lintas). Gunakan kata penghubung seperti "because" atau "for example". Batasi 3–4 kalimat.

例: Yes, bikes have become quite popular in my country recently. I think this is largely because electric bikes are more affordable and convenient for short commutes. For example, many people choose e-bikes to avoid traffic jams and save money on fuel.

× Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child. When I was a child, my parents brought me to.

✓ Yeah, I had a bike when I was a child. When I was a child, my parents bought it for me.

The verb 'brought' is incorrect here because the intended meaning is that the parents purchased the bike; the correct past-tense verb is 'bought'. Also the original sentence ends with a preposition 'to' without an object, making it incomplete. Use 'bought it for me' to clearly express that the parents purchased the bike. Suggestion: use 'bought' for purchasing and ensure sentences have necessary objects.

× Yeah definitely Bikers become popular in my country recently.

✓ Yeah, definitely cyclists have become popular in my country recently.

The phrase 'become popular recently' requires the present perfect tense to link past change to the present, so 'have become' is correct. 'Bikers' is not wrong but 'cyclists' is more natural; also a comma after 'Yeah' and 'definitely' improves fluency. Suggestion: use present perfect (have/has + past participle) for actions that started in the past and continue or have relevance now.

× One of the reason is Electro electronical bike in which was Ryzen for almost 5 year.

✓ One of the reasons is the rise of electric bicycles, which has been happening for almost five years.

Several issues: 'One of the reason' should be plural 'reasons' (singular/plural agreement). 'Electro electronical bike' is an incorrect word choice and form; use 'electric bicycles' or 'electric bikes'. 'in which was Ryzen' is ungrammatical and likely intended to mean 'the rise', so use 'the rise of'. 'was' and 'for almost 5 year' need present perfect progressive or present perfect ('has been happening') and correct plural 'years'. Suggestion: ensure noun agreement (one of the reasons), choose correct vocabulary ('rise' and 'electric bikes'), and use present perfect for actions occurring over a period up to now.