Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains irrelevant or incorrect phrases (e.g. “hot bike,” “I don't eat a lot”). Keep answers concise (max 5 sentences), start with a clear topic sentence, and add specific supporting details using linking words. For example, say whether you had a bike, describe it briefly, explain how often you used it, and mention a short reason or memory. Avoid unrelated words and hesitations.

例: Yes, I had a bicycle as a child. It was a small red bike with a basket, and I rode it mostly on weekends with my family. Because my neighborhood was quiet, I felt safe cycling around the park. I really enjoyed it and learned to ride without training wheels when I was six.

提案: The answer is disorganised and grammatically incorrect. Start with a direct opinion, then give two clear reasons using linking words (e.g. 'because', 'however'). Provide a specific example or comparison to support your view. Reduce hesitations and finish with a short concluding comment.

例: No, I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country. The main reason is safety: many roads lack bike lanes, so cycling can be dangerous. Also, public attitudes favor cars, and people often travel longer distances, which makes bikes less practical. For these reasons, relatively few people commute by bike here.

× Yeah, a hot bike, but I don't eat a lot. I just use some time in the weekend with my family. But actually I really love to bike.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child, but I didn't use it very often. I only rode it for a short time on weekends with my family. Actually, I really loved riding my bike.

Multiple errors: 'a hot bike' is incorrect word choice—likely meant 'a small/old/cheap bike' or simply 'a bike' (word choice error). 'I don't eat a lot' is unrelated to biking and is incorrect tense and meaning; it should be 'I didn't use it very often' to match past context (Sentence structure error, tense error). 'I just use some time in the weekend' is wrong: 'use time' is unnatural for riding a bike, and preposition 'in the weekend' should be 'on weekends' or 'at the weekend' (Incorrect preposition and collocation; also plural 'weekends' fits habitual action). 'I really love to bike' in past context should be 'I really loved riding my bike' to keep past tense and use correct verb form ('ride' -> 'riding'). Suggestion: choose words that match intended meaning, keep past tense consistent when talking about childhood, use correct collocations: 'ride a bike', 'on weekends', 'didn't use it often'.

× Uh, actually, I don't think it's, uh, popular like this in our country is not really safe. So I don't think that's many people viewed it and usually.

✓ Actually, I don't think biking is very popular in our country because it is not very safe. So I don't think many people ride bikes here usually.

This original sentence has multiple problems: confusing structure and run-on fragments ('I don't think it's, uh, popular like this in our country is not really safe' mixes two clauses without proper connection). 'it's' is vague—replace with 'biking' to name the subject (Incorrect pronoun reference/clarity). 'is not really safe' should be connected with 'because' to show reason (incorrect conjunction/structure). 'I don't think that's many people viewed it and usually' is ungrammatical: 'that's' is wrong; 'many people viewed it' uses wrong verb 'view' and wrong tense; 'usually' misplaced. Correct verb is 'ride' for biking, and habitual adverb 'usually' should follow the verb or clause. Suggestion: make sentence simple and clear: state opinion, give reason with 'because', use correct verb 'ride' and place adverb 'usually' appropriately.