Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Clarify facts, correct vocabulary and grammar, keep answer concise and natural. Start with a clear topic sentence stating whether you had a bike, give one or two specific details (what kind of bike, who gave it, how you used it), and avoid incorrect numbers or awkward words. Use past tense consistently and limit to 2–4 sentences.

例: Yes, I had a bike when I was a child. It was a small red bicycle that my parents gave me for my tenth birthday, and I used it to ride to school and play with friends every afternoon.

提案: Give a clear opinion, use correct collocations and reasons, and organize supporting details with linking words. State whether bikes are popular, then give 2 specific reasons (e.g., traffic, cost, environment) with simple linking words like 'because' or 'so'. Avoid repetition and incorrect words like 'political' or 'realize' here.

例: Yes, bicycles are very popular in my country because they help avoid heavy traffic and are much cheaper than cars. For example, many people cycle to work since it's faster in crowded cities and better for the environment.

× Yes, I had a bike when I was a child around 70 years old.

✓ Yes, I had a bike when I was a child about 7 years old.

The student likely meant their age as a child; '70 years old' is incorrect in context. Use 'about 7 years old' or 'when I was seven' to refer to a childhood age. Also 'around' with a specific age is fine but 'about' is more natural here. Ensure the past tense 'had' matches the time reference.

× It was tolerated and a small bike and my parents give me my birthday.

✓ It was a small, old bike and my parents gave it to me for my birthday.

This sentence has several problems: 'tolerated' is the wrong word (likely meant 'old' or 'secondhand'), missing articles, wrong verb tense 'give' should be past 'gave', and missing object pronoun 'it'. Correct structure: use articles ('a small, old bike'), past tense 'gave', and include 'to me' or 'gave it to me' to show who received the bike. Use commas to join adjectives properly.

× Yes, bicycles are political popular in my country because they're they're a huge traffic problem and it's easy to to arrive somewhere anymore and it makes sense to realize.

✓ Yes, bicycles are quite popular in my country because they help with huge traffic problems and it's easy to get somewhere by bike, so it makes sense to use them.

Multiple issues: 'political popular' is incorrect; likely 'quite' or 'very' is intended. Repeated words 'they're they're' and 'to to' are typos. 'A huge traffic problem' should be pluralized or rephrased; better: 'help with huge traffic problems'. 'Arrive somewhere anymore' is unnatural; use 'get somewhere' and omit 'anymore'. 'Makes sense to realize' is incorrect: use 'makes sense to use them' or 'is sensible'. Adjust verb forms for clarity and correctness.