Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Be more natural and concise. Start with a clear topic sentence that directly answers the question, then add one or two supporting details using correct grammar. Avoid filler words and awkward phrasing (e.g., ‘when I was kid’ → ‘when I was a child’; ‘when I was good’ is unclear). Use a linking word if you add a reason or detail.

例: Yes. My father gave me a bright red bicycle for my sixth birthday, and I used it every day to ride around the neighborhood. Because I practiced a lot, I became confident riding on small roads by the time I was eight.

提案: Answer directly and organize your ideas: give a clear opinion, then one or two specific reasons with linking words. Fix grammar and incomplete phrases, and provide concrete details (e.g., traffic, infrastructure, cultural preferences). Keep to 2–4 sentences for clarity.

例: I don't think bicycles are very popular in my country nowadays. For example, many people prefer cars or motorbikes because cities are crowded and there are few dedicated cycle lanes. As a result, cycling is more common in parks or rural areas than in urban centers.

× Well when I was kid my dad gifted me a new bike on my 6th birthday.

✓ Well, when I was a kid, my dad gifted me a new bike on my sixth birthday.

Missing article before 'kid' and punctuation; 'a kid' is required. Also spell out ordinal 'sixth' or use '6th' consistently; commas improve clarity. Suggestion: use 'a kid' and add commas after introductory phrase.

× So basically yes I had one when I was good.

✓ So basically yes, I had one when I was young.

The phrase 'when I was good' is incorrect meaning-wise and uses wrong adjective; 'young' correctly expresses childhood. Also add a comma after 'yes' for natural speech rhythm.

× Well, not too much because as a kid we prefer to have a bike, but now we we prefer the.

✓ Well, not really; as kids we preferred to have a bike, but now we prefer not to.

Tense and pronoun number errors: 'as a kid we prefer' mixes singular article with plural pronoun and present tense; referring to past preference should be past tense 'preferred'. Duplicate 'we' removed. The clause 'but now we prefer the' is incomplete; 'prefer not to' completes the idea. Suggestion: match plurality and tense and complete the sentence.

× So I don't think that the the bike is good for everyone, especially now there's no streets special.

✓ So I don't think that bikes are good for everyone, especially now there are no special streets.

Definite article repeated ('the the') and incorrect article usage: general statement about bikes should use plural 'bikes' not 'the bike'. Also 'there's no streets special' has word order and agreement errors: use 'there are no special streets'. Suggestion: use plural for generalizations and correct subject-verb agreement and word order.