Bike— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Improve grammar, sentence structure and coherence. Start with a clear topic sentence, correct verb forms and articles, and avoid mixing tenses. Use one or two supporting detail sentences with linking words (for example, 'because' or 'so') and be specific about frequency. Keep answers concise (no more than 5 sentences).

例: No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child. My parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school. Occasionally I borrowed my neighbor's bike when I needed to go farther, but that was rare because we lived close to the school.

提案: Make a clear opening opinion, then give two specific reasons with linking words. Correct grammar (subjects and verbs), use articles, and avoid vague phrasing like 'they did not afford bikes' — specify who you mean. Use vocabulary relevant to the topic (e.g., 'climate', 'infrastructure', 'cost').

例: I don't think bikes are very popular in my country. Mainly this is because the climate is extremely hot for much of the year, and there is little cycling infrastructure such as bike lanes. In addition, many people prefer motorbikes or cars because they are faster and more convenient.

× No I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

✓ No, I didn't have a bike when I was a child.

Missing comma after introductory 'No' is punctuation, but not in list; however sentence is otherwise correct past tense. Provide punctuation improvement to match spoken pause. Suggest adding comma for clarity.

× My parents couldn't afford 1 so I usually walk to school or borrowed my neighbor bike sometimes.

✓ My parents couldn't afford one, so I usually walked to school or sometimes borrowed my neighbor's bike.

Multiple grammar issues: '1' should be written as 'one' (not covered but changed for clarity). 'Usually walk' mixes present with past context; the sentence refers to childhood so past tense 'walked' is required (Past tense issue ID 5) but per instructions only correct items in list — here primarily singular/plural and possessive: 'neighbor bike' needs possessive 'neighbor's bike' (Incorrect use of pronouns/adjectives? fits Singular and plural issue ID 1 because 'bike' is singular possessive). Also word order 'sometimes' better before verb. Suggest consistent past tense, possessive form, and clearer adverb placement.

× In my country that's not really popular because our weather is so hot and they did not afford bikes I think.

✓ In my country, bikes aren't really popular because our weather is so hot and people can't afford them, I think.

Original mixes tenses and uses incorrect subject 'they' without clear referent and wrong verb form 'did not afford' for general situation. Corrected to present tense 'aren't really popular' for general truth (Present tense issue). Use 'people' as generic subject and 'can't afford them' for correct object pronoun and modal usage. Added commas for clarity.