T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Try to make your answer more natural and clear by using correct grammar and avoiding redundancy. Start with a direct response, then add specific details using linking words. For example, instead of 'I have plethora of T-shirts and I wear daily routine', say 'I wear T-shirts every day because I have a large collection.' Also, use correct words like 'T-shirts' instead of 'teachers'.

例: I wear T-shirts almost every day because I have a large collection. Moreover, I prefer those with cartoon themes as they are fashionable and reflect my interests.

提案: Your answer is good but can be improved by linking ideas smoothly and correcting minor grammar errors. Use linking words like 'because' or 'so' to connect your points. Also, say 'the nearest Nike store' instead of 'nearest Nike franchise'.

例: Yes, I often buy T-shirts because they are comfortable and make me look attractive. Recently, I purchased two or three T-shirts from the nearest Nike store, and they are of very good quality.

提案: Focus on clarity and correct word usage. Replace 'teachers' with 'T-shirts' and use proper tense. Start with a clear topic sentence, then add specific details with linking words. For example, 'I think older people in my country prefer comfortable and good quality T-shirts, although they may not follow the latest fashion trends.'

例: I think older people in my country usually wear comfortable and good quality T-shirts. However, they do not often follow the latest fashion trends when choosing their clothes.

提案: Improve your answer by using correct tense and clearer sentence structure. Use linking words to connect ideas. For example, say 'I had many T-shirts with cartoon characters like Batman, Doraemon, and Shin Chan, which I wore regularly.'

例: Yes, when I was a kid, I had many T-shirts with cartoon characters such as Batman, Doraemon, and Shin Chan. I used to wear them regularly because I liked those cartoons a lot.

× To be honest, since from childhood I am always fascinated in T-shirts.

✓ To be honest, since childhood I have always been fascinated by T-shirts.

The phrase 'since from childhood' is incorrect; 'since childhood' is the correct expression. Also, 'fascinated in' should be 'fascinated by'. Additionally, the tense should reflect a continuous state from childhood to present, so 'have always been fascinated' is appropriate.

× I have plethora of T-shirts and I wear daily routine and I wear T-shirts which are very fashionable and genuine and I like most teachers which has a cartoon theme.

✓ I have a plethora of T-shirts and I wear them daily. I wear T-shirts which are very fashionable and genuine, and I like most T-shirts which have a cartoon theme.

The phrase 'I have plethora' is missing the article 'a'. 'I wear daily routine' is incorrect; it should be 'I wear them daily'. 'Teachers' is incorrect; it should be 'T-shirts'. Also, 'which has' should be 'which have' to agree with the plural subject 'T-shirts'.

× Definitely, I have a lot of interest in buying T-shirts which are very comfortable and give me a very attractive look.

✓ Definitely, I have a lot of interest in buying T-shirts that are very comfortable and give me a very attractive look.

While 'which' is not strictly incorrect, 'that' is more appropriate for defining clauses in this context. No major preposition error here, but 'that' improves clarity.

× And recently I have purchased two or three shirts from nearest Nike franchise and they are very good quality.

✓ And recently I have purchased two or three shirts from the nearest Nike franchise, and they are of very good quality.

The phrase 'from nearest Nike franchise' is missing the definite article 'the'. Also, 'very good quality' should be preceded by 'of' to indicate possession or characteristic.

× Well, I personally think that there are no fashionable teachers for older people in country.

✓ Well, I personally think that there are no fashionable T-shirts for older people in the country.

'Teachers' is incorrect; it should be 'T-shirts'. Also, 'in country' is missing the definite article 'the' before 'country'.

× The older people wore some genuine and some variety of T-shirts which are in very good quality and give them a comfortable.

✓ The older people wear some genuine and various types of T-shirts which are of very good quality and give them comfort.

The verb 'wore' is past tense, but the context suggests a general statement, so present tense 'wear' is appropriate. 'Some variety' should be 'various types' for clarity. 'Are in very good quality' should be 'are of very good quality'. 'Give them a comfortable' is incomplete; it should be 'give them comfort'.

× Absolutely, when I was a kid I have a plethora of T-shirts in my wardrobe.

✓ Absolutely, when I was a kid I had a plethora of T-shirts in my wardrobe.

The phrase 'when I was a kid' sets a past time frame, so the verb should be in past tense 'had' instead of present perfect 'have'.

× I have AT shirt like they are based on some cartoon picture like Batman, Doraemon and Shin Chan and I wear it them in daily routine.

✓ I had T-shirts that are based on some cartoon characters like Batman, Doraemon, and Shin Chan, and I wore them daily.

'AT shirt' is unclear; likely meant 'T-shirts'. 'They are based' is present tense but should be consistent with past tense 'had'. 'I wear it them' is incorrect; should be 'I wore them'. 'In daily routine' should be 'daily' or 'on a daily basis'.