T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to start directly with a clear topic sentence, avoid redundancy, and use correct grammar. Also, avoid vague phrases like 'sense of privacy' which do not fit well here. Use linking words to connect ideas smoothly.

例: I usually wear T-shirts every day because they are comfortable and keep me feeling fresh. Moreover, they suit my casual lifestyle and are easy to pair with different clothes.

提案: Your answer is vague and repetitive with filler words like 'like'. Try to give a clear frequency and avoid unnecessary fillers. Use linking words to explain your buying habits more effectively.

例: I don't buy T-shirts very often; usually, I purchase one every month or two when I need new ones.

提案: Your answer lacks clarity and coherence. Avoid uncertain phrases like 'I don't know' in your response. Use linking words to connect your ideas and provide specific reasons or examples to support your opinion.

例: T-shirts are quite fashionable among older people in my country. They generally prefer plain T-shirts with simple designs because these suit their personality better, and they tend to avoid printed ones as they find them too flashy.

提案: Your answer has grammatical errors and some unclear phrases. Use past tense consistently and avoid awkward expressions like 'clothes of deeper quality'. Also, try to link your ideas logically and be more specific.

例: Yes, I often wore T-shirts when I was a child. My mother bought many high-quality T-shirts for me from brands like Adidas because children need comfortable clothes that do not cause allergic reactions.

× Yes, I usually wear T-shirts every day. It has become an important part of life and I feel very refreshing and comfortable in that clothes and it gives me a sense of privacy.

✓ Yes, I usually wear T-shirts every day. They have become an important part of life and I feel very refreshed and comfortable in those clothes and they give me a sense of privacy.

The sentence incorrectly uses 'It has become' referring to plural 'T-shirts', so 'They have become' is correct (There be issue). Also, 'that clothes' is incorrect because 'clothes' is plural and needs 'those' instead of 'that'. Additionally, 'refreshing' should be 'refreshed' to describe the feeling (Incorrect use of adjectives or adverbs).

× Not so often. Like I buy T-shirts like every week or like every month.

✓ Not so often. I buy T-shirts about every week or every month.

The use of 'like' as a filler is informal and unnecessary. The sentence should be clear and concise. Also, 'buy' in present tense is correct here as it describes habitual action (Present tense issue).

× T-shirts are fashionable, but I think older people usually like to wear plain T-shirts of different designs which suit their personality and they always avoid printed T-shirts as they think they are more. I don't know.

✓ T-shirts are fashionable, but I think older people usually like to wear plain T-shirts of different designs which suit their personality, and they always avoid printed T-shirts because they think they are too much. I don't know.

The sentence lacks proper conjunction and punctuation to separate ideas clearly. 'As' is better replaced with 'because' for clarity. The phrase 'they are more' is incomplete and unclear; 'too much' clarifies the meaning (Incorrect conjunction use).

× Yes, I often wear tshirts when I was a child and my mother had bought so many T-shirts for me of different brands like from Adidas and all the best quality.

✓ Yes, I often wore T-shirts when I was a child and my mother bought many T-shirts for me from different brands like Adidas, all of the best quality.

The verb 'wear' should be in past tense 'wore' to match 'when I was a child'. 'Had bought' is past perfect but simple past 'bought' is sufficient here. 'So many' can be replaced with 'many' for formality. 'Like from Adidas' is better as 'from different brands like Adidas' (Past tense issue).

× As children need a extra care with their clothes and clothes of deeper quality can cause allergic reaction.

✓ As children need extra care with their clothes and clothes of better quality can cause allergic reactions.

'A extra care' is incorrect; 'extra care' is uncountable and does not need 'a'. 'Deeper quality' is incorrect; 'better quality' is appropriate. 'Allergic reaction' should be plural 'allergic reactions' to generalize (Incorrect use of quantifiers).