T-shirt— Part 1 採点レポート

提案: Your answer is somewhat repetitive and lacks clarity. Try to make your sentences more concise and avoid repeating phrases like 'because of it because'. Also, use linking words to connect your ideas smoothly.

例: I often wear T-shirts because they are comfortable and easy to maintain, as I don't need to iron them after washing.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to structure your response with a clear topic sentence and supporting details. Use correct grammar and vocabulary relevant to the context.

例: Yes, I often buy T-shirts because I usually wear them at home. I prefer T-shirts since they are affordable and comfortable to wear.

提案: Your answer is confusing and has many grammatical mistakes. Try to answer directly and clearly, using linking words to explain reasons. Avoid unnecessary repetition and unclear phrases.

例: In my country, older people usually do not prefer T-shirts because they are more culturally inclined and prefer wearing traditional outfits.

提案: Your answer is unclear and contains grammatical errors. Try to express your ideas clearly with correct sentence structure and avoid repetition. Use linking words to connect your ideas.

例: I wore different kinds of T-shirts during my childhood. I remember once my mother scolded me because I tore my T-shirt while playing.

× I wear T-shirts often because of it because it provides the comfort and it is easier to organize as I don't have to iron it after we wash.

✓ I wear T-shirts often because they provide comfort and are easier to manage since I don't have to iron them after washing.

The original sentence incorrectly uses 'because of it' and 'the comfort' which is unnatural. Also, 'organize' is not the correct verb here; 'manage' or 'handle' fits better. 'We wash' should be 'washing' to indicate the action. The pronoun 'it' should be plural 'them' to agree with 'T-shirts'.

× Yes, I do buy many T-shirts as I usually wear T-shirts only in my home as well as in.

✓ Yes, I do buy many T-shirts as I usually wear them only at home.

The phrase 'as well as in' is incomplete and unclear. Also, 'wear T-shirts only in my home' is better expressed as 'wear them only at home' for clarity and correctness. The pronoun 'them' correctly refers back to 'T-shirts'.

× I prefer T-shirts because it's affordability and the is they provide when I wear it.

✓ I prefer T-shirts because of their affordability and the comfort they provide when I wear them.

The phrase 'it's affordability' is incorrect; it should be 'their affordability' to match plural 'T-shirts'. 'The is they provide' is ungrammatical and should be 'the comfort they provide'. Also, 'it' should be 'them' to agree with plural 'T-shirts'.

× In my country, people or the place I live, people generally the old people generally don't prefer to wear AT shirt because they are more culturally involved and so they like to wear the traditional outfit of my mumta.

✓ In my country, especially where I live, older people generally don't prefer to wear T-shirts because they are more culturally involved and prefer to wear the traditional outfit of my community.

The sentence has redundant and unclear phrases like 'people or the place I live, people generally the old people generally'. 'AT shirt' is likely a typo for 'a T-shirt'. 'My mumta' is unclear; assuming it refers to 'my community' or 'my culture'. Pronouns and articles are corrected for clarity and grammar.

× It's definitely a weird variety of T-shirts in my childhood.

✓ I definitely wore a variety of T-shirts in my childhood.

The original sentence uses present tense 'It's' and 'a weird variety' which is awkward. The past tense 'wore' is appropriate to describe past habits. 'Weird variety' is vague; 'a variety' is clearer.

× I remember my mother told me that once I was get scolded by my by my mother because I tear my T-shirt while playing.

✓ I remember my mother told me that once I was scolded by her because I tore my T-shirt while playing.

'Was get scolded' is incorrect; correct passive past tense is 'was scolded'. 'Tear' should be past tense 'tore' to match the past event. Repetition 'by my by my mother' is corrected to 'by her' for clarity.